Reviews for Ship of the Line: Far Traveler |
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![]() ![]() ![]() God I wish you would one day return and continue this story. |
![]() ![]() I hope the story continues. It’s really good. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Enjoyed this chapter, especially the description and pov of the ship. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Any chance for a link to a picture of the ship. I am having trouble with visualizing it. Other than that I’m looking forward to seeing what you do next with this story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thank you. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thank you for the update, it’s greatly appreciated. I hate that Kinsey is included, probably Clinton’s worst idea since Lewinsky. I’m just hoping it’s to have something horribly entertaining happen to Kinsey. |
![]() ![]() ...out of curiosity, where is Amy's dad? She was talking about inviting him up to the Far Traveler, much like Buffy invited her mother. |
![]() ![]() ![]() So happy for this chapter. I feel like I've been waiting years, I can't wait to see how Jack and Xander interact. Also wanting to see how Kinsey puts his foot down his own throat. |
![]() ![]() First off, I'm happy you're back to writing this and look forward to more chapters sooner rather than later. Just some notes, more on the previous chapter then this one, you mentioned 'Colonel' Paul Davis. In SG-1 he was originally introduced as a Captain and quickly became a Major not long after. At this point in time, I think he was still a captain but I'm not sure. Pretty sure he never became a colonel during the series unless it happened much later, and I don't remember it or it was mentioned in the SGU series, which I saw sporadically and not completely. When talking about Kinsey you changed which state he was the senator for at least twice, Connecticut and Kentucky were both said, with Kentucky being correct if I'm not mistaken. Finally, you mentioned in the previous chapter that Joyce was named 'Rejoice' after her change to the Pelkon species but introduced her in the latest chapter as Joyful Laughter. So should clean that up a bit and perhaps reread what you wrote previously to catch up since it's been a while that you were working on this fic. Pretty sure there are some things I missed or noticed but forgot about pretty quick. Nonetheless I look forward to your next update. |
![]() ![]() "I served as ambassador to Norway under President Nixon." - in response to this line of dialogue, I feel sorry for the Norwegian government, and delighted at the suffering this must have inflicted on Nixon. :D You, my dear sir, are a genius on so many levels. *hugs* |
![]() ![]() ![]() First of all great story. I keep rolling my eyes when they keep talking about the US using the ship to take over the world, then I remember the show was set in California and that in Star Gate Senator Kinsey existed. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I think the exposition was well done! A great example of how to "show, don't tell" in a written form for the most part. Some info dumps were required without completely jumping around tinewise with flashbacks that would disturb the flow if things. A balancing act for sure! Thank you for the story! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Just reread this before chapter 5. Great read and hope you write lots more soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Nice to see this back. Good chapter lots of intreresting background details and set up. Looking forward to the next chapter, thanks for sharing. |
![]() ![]() ![]() thanks for continuing this story |