So - I really struggled with this one. I'm not talking about the fact this is shounen-ai, though I might argue the content felt majorly mild. In the same manner I felt underwhelmed by the shounen-ai elements, I also felt overwhelmed with the - well, use of words in general. It's not often I'm left with the urge to take a red pen to a given piece. For example, the writer uses the word "and" twice in the very first sentence. Other times, the writer uses pronouns in a vague manner which means the reader can't easily identify what the pronoun is meant to indicate, if at all.

That said, I'm also the last person who will tell the writer that the story would be good if only they fixed that problem, because that's not true either. The use of words - yes, they do detract from the story, particularly for someone who needs the writers to say what they mean to say and not come close to it, but there's nothing inherently bad about the piece. In fact, the writer was one of the writers who picked up on the whole thing regarding Obito and Kakashi's eye.

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i love your story , its so great. but it seems that its a dead project and you dont want continue this. i hope you reconsider and UPDATE SOON

It's interesting 8D I'd love to read more.

On another note, all my child Iruka with teen Kakashi fantasies have been shattered cuz of the fact they're only a year apart xD

But I enjoy these kinds of stories. So much :D Hope to see what's next.

Obviously, I realize that this story is forgotten but I just wanted to let you know that I ADORE ADORE the premise and plot you've thrown our characters in.

Although we now know what happened between Kakashi and Obito (that was damn close though), I love how Kakashi and Iruka met under these circumstances...

I truly, LOVE it. I love love love the idea of Iruka and Kakashi meeting young (or in their teens in this case) and there aren't enough (in fact, this is the first one) of them out there.

It's too bad but I also understand if this isn't continued.

Again, GREAT story so far!

so, are you planning on writing a follow up?

I'd love to see more of this story!

*flops around* In ten days It'll be three years. Three long, torturous years. *whimper* Please P.S. Speare-sama~ Please continue with this story, it remains to this day my fav. KakaIru fikkie and it's not even really KakaIru yet. ;-; I shall bribe you with...brownies! Smores~ brownies. w You know you can't resist.

Great start but 3 yrs is a litle long to keep people waiting!

Cute

Awesome! Please continue!

ps- Kaka-Iru is the best paring EVER!

Perriot

Wite more, pease! Wite more! _

HURRY UP WIT NEXT CHAPY

Lovely storey. I like the way you write. Please write more!