Reviews for Little Blue Orphan
RIO2Lover100 chapter 5 . 9/26/2020
Well let’s hope Blu can forget these hallucinations
Jaqui The Girl Spix Macaw chapter 5 . 9/26/2020
I don't know how you do it but once again you made me cry with this new episode. It was very beautiful that Blu looked at Jewel and Linda as his mother. with everything I read I wanted to hug my mom

I identified with Blu when she was rejected by the other birds (I'm different like Blu). It was also very sad that Blu looked at her own dead parents. keep writing friend each chapter is a work of art

Atte: Jaqui
Guest chapter 5 . 9/25/2020
Rio fanfiction about dreaming parents is feeling so real please continue

Have a clear mind and good day LM
monsterjamvadim chapter 5 . 9/24/2020
I hope jewel can help Blu
RIO2Lover100 chapter 4 . 9/17/2020
Well let’s see if Blu will get the chance To be with his parents one day if they’re still alive
Jaqui The Girl Spix Macaw chapter 4 . 9/9/2020
once again you stood out with this chapter. The flashback of Blu and Jewel in the Amazon was very good and the conversation they had was tantalizing. It made me laugh when Tiago looked at his parents struggling (I got the joke). I hope Blu can get over the loss of her parents.

Atte: Jaqui
monsterjamvadim chapter 4 . 9/9/2020

love the ending LOL
RIO2Lover100 chapter 3 . 9/4/2020
Well I hope Blu May get to see his parents sometime in the future
Jaqui The Girl Spix Macaw chapter 3 . 9/3/2020
this chapter was very beautiful. Blu remembered more about her parents and it was nice that she looked at Jewel's face like her mother's (you're not the only one who imagines Blu's mother with brown eyes). keep writing friend

Atte: Jaqui
Jaqui The Girl Spix Macaw chapter 2 . 8/24/2020
Don't reconcile ... you made me cry in this episode. It was very beautiful when Blu looked at Tiago being a chick like him and at Bia with the face of his supposed mother (also with Jewel). This chapter touched my heart and more when Jewel understood the state of sadness. I liked the creativity you put into the lyrics of the song "Real in Rio". It's as if those same words were the key to finding Blu's parents.

Do not stop writing friend

Atte: Jaqui
Jaqui The Girl Spix Macaw chapter 1 . 8/24/2020
woooo ... your story is very good. this is how I imagine RIO 3. where Blu tries to find out where she came from and who her parents are

do not stop writing friend

Atte: Jaqui
monsterjamvadim chapter 2 . 8/23/2020

You have so much potential as an author and yet you don't like OLIVER AND COMPANY


FilmedIt chapter 2 . 8/23/2020
Since you are better at writing then me, the only criticism I would be able to give is on the story.

So far. Very engaging. Though with the end where they are to eachother. I get the emotion of it. But... What is the lullaby?

Fuck... that wasnt even criticism... uhh...

good story.
RIO2Lover100 chapter 2 . 8/23/2020
Well I hope Blu will eventually find his parents
Sledge Macaw chapter 1 . 7/18/2020
I overall really liked this chapter. The utilization of Blu's past as a chick was well warranted. I think the use of him getting captured as a chick and then suddenly getting traumatic experiences from it is very creative. In addition, I liked the ending scene where Blu "sees," his mother in Jewel with her eye color.

Only minor mistakes with spelling but spelling mistakes are common. In addition, I saw some of the dialogue missing a comma and some having an extra one.

P.S: What the what with the "wingjob..." scene...
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