Reviews for The Son That Could Have Been- Naruto Uzumaki Namikaze
dai sennin kurosaki d naruto chapter 4 . 10/19
tsunade & jiraiya got together too fast & she's also much too sweet to naruto & jiraiya. tsunade is not the domestic type. i can't see tsunade & jiraiya not teaching naruto everything he needed to know. the whole not holding his hand thing is a lame excuse. there's a fine line between teaching, not teaching, & holding their hand throughout. neither jiraiya & tsunade are the hand holding types but they would teach him. naruto would be a beast by the end of the academy b/c they know how bad the world is so they'd prepare him.
dai sennin kurosaki d naruto chapter 2 . 10/17
i still don't understand why keeping their identities a secret until he joined the academy. also why stay so isolated he should've been growing up around the clan kids. also you're not likely to see either jiraiya or tsunade calling the 3rd "3rd" or "hokage-sama" it's almost always going to be Sensei.
dai sennin kurosaki d naruto chapter 1 . 10/17
where's shizune?
EMR-one7 chapter 4 . 10/16
I love how you just keep taking pot shots at the original series. XD The orange jumpsuit, Anko eating fat free dango, etc. To be honest, Anko should’ve ate some fat free dango for real if it meant she would avoid becoming what she became in Boruto lol. I don’t know how someone as active as a ninja gains all that weight but whatever. In any case, I enjoyed the chapter and I’m glad to hear you’re working on your other story as well. Stay motivated!
JintoLin chapter 4 . 10/13
Maybe we should work together then you would never have a problem with a talkative co-worker thou you might get bored if you wanted someone to talk to :P as i am not a social person at all but i do hope that gets worked out as it is annoying when people can't take a hint you want to be left alone

Good setup with the training as i don't know if it was you intention but i feel building up their body and control would only better help them once they get into learning Ninjutsu.

Shino is the best teammate :) trying to keep Naruto from doing something he wound beat himself up over later as well as trying to get Sakura to focus more on her career than getting a date with a guy that has shown no interest in her. Maybe Choji can remove the stick from Sasuke's rear. Even if Sakura might not like Naruto it was still a rude comment putting down your teammate so maybe Inner can beat some sense into her

Waterfall Arc - super excited about this for many reasons on being going to see the best Jinchuuriki who i love dearly and need all the attention and hugs but also because original content that fits into the canon timeline. Naruto getting a training partner in Tenten which can only make the both better in end

While i tend to not point out or request ships but...since Shino is on the team for this mission maybe he might find a bug girlfriend :P or at the vary least Team 8 showing her not everyone in the world is rotten
zachosg7 chapter 4 . 10/10
interesting fic, hope for more soon

I love the Sakura and Inner Sakura banter

I will fav and follow to see where this goes
Guest chapter 4 . 10/9
First of all, great chapter!

No problem. We all make mistakes. That's why I'm rewriting my own fic for this series.

Why does it feel like you're alluding to Sakura screwing up big time or that someone might take him away from her? Hmm... Interesting. Can't wait to see what you'll do with this fic. Hopefully you do it to the end. The good ones tend to be taken from us early.
MonsterOfLogic chapter 4 . 10/9
great chapter, but I wanted to ask you to not put every little detail, from next chapter, you can skip some things if you like, because this chapter was slow in my opinion... or in simple words 'I just want to see your version of older Naruto soon and some romance too, quick LoL'
Akamatt chapter 4 . 10/9
Good Chapter! Looking forward to more!
Mimi-moo224 chapter 4 . 10/9
Thank you for the chapter! Also the people you work with sound terrible so I hope it gets better!
Beastyd22 chapter 4 . 10/8
Awesome chapter man keep up the awesome work and update again soon thanks.
Mimi-moo224 chapter 3 . 10/5
Hello! I just wanted to stop by and tell you how much I love this! I only recently found this, but I wanted to mention how much I enjoy the amount of detail you put into this. I can only imagine how much work you put into each chapter. I’m super excited for future updates ︎
JintoLin chapter 3 . 10/2
I don't think enough people use Inner at all and if they do they agree with each other which is weird but i do like you have Inner trying to get her to see that she is being a bit harsh to Naruto. Speaking of that harsh treatment it does make more sense here that it is because she is confused as she likes Sasuke while also having 'weird' feelings for Naruto so it acting out with the point of her frustration.

I had to re-read the second chapter as it had been a while and i was also down on health so i got a lot to catch up on but never one to complain to re-read something i been enjoying so i think i always talking with you about the teams was once again going over who the team could be as i was reading Naruto and Sakura was a given while i wanted Ino was happy to see Shino and was all but screaming YES when Team 8 was formed and laughing a bit too much when Anko was picked to assist followed by her habit of showing up too soon or she does it on purpose to annoy her friends :P

The weights i don't mind as it is not that different than what Gai is doing at the moment as both Jonin are seen as having a screw loose while people don't know are some of the most sane people in the Village.

Liked the NaruSaku moments they were cute with out going to far in rushing things as i have read as Naruto ends up on a team with a girl than 10 minutes later they are talking about dating

Oh and best of luck to you on your own healing progress hope things start looking up for you :D
Guest chapter 3 . 9/30
I'm a little confused.

'Inner, not now! I don't like Naruto like that. And plus I doubt he likes me like that.' Sakura said to inner.

Didn't Naruto already tell her that he had feelings for her last chapter?
AvexedAuthor chapter 2 . 9/21
So illusion clones are the only clones genin new, solid clones are elemental or shadow variants and require high chakra capacity. If anything he shouldnt be able to make illusion clones
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