I was just about to gibe up on this. I want more Harry interacting with known characters like Leia and Obi Wan

End? This is just the beginning! Harry, Leila, Luke and Arden, dashing action and sweet romance! The development of the secret base for possibly rebel high command and more!

If they look for AA 23 they won't find Mody, as you wrote he was taken to AA 22...

Outstanding! To the sequel! *Quickly runs away*

since when does water affect lightsabers? LOL

...a Bothan? seriously? maybe I am biased by Borsk, but fuck those guys. Harry already has a traitor in his midst who will try to take over.

so, I actually have a pretty major problem with Javoc and Corsek. you have them desert the empire out of moral concerns, only to then sign up as bodyguards for a fucking slaver.

doesn't really make sense.

first comment would be on the empire assaulting Nar Shaddaa. the empire is mostly supposed to be at peace with the Hutts. and that moon is literally the second most important base of the Hutts. and orbits the most important, Nal Hutta. no way the hutts would just tale that lying down.

another comment would be that Arden would be a near human, not a human. Dathomir is filled with Irridoniana/Zabraks.

the other was about Wulf Yularen. mainly because I was absolutely positive that he was an Admiral in the clone wars, but they really did demote his ass for the ISB, for some reason, heh.

also, it was pretty jarring, watching the clone wars cartoon, only to discover that he was on the death star. tarkin was still an asshole in the show. though I found it ironic that tarkin was somewhat friends with Anakin on it.

...you had Harry name his ship after the Devil.

you talk about Tarkin not having any friends to do him any favors. at this point in the timeline, Tarkin is literally the third most powerful man in the Empire. he doesn't need friends.

could be interesting. though the old republic Era is my favorite star wars setting.

Why does Harry have a heart of gold, it's like he's a bleeding saint or something. He's a muggleborn crashing a pureblood event, a bull in a china shop, someone with no concept of what the rules of society are and is judging everyone around him based on his own preconcieved notions. Basically he's being an ass and doesn't seem to realise that the world doesn't conform to him.

Alright, a good bit of well written fun..
The only question i have , is if he's changed his name for imperial records, why, in every base they break into, does he go by his real one?

The whole point of the first chapter is to interest people in the story. This does nothing. I have no idea what is going on in the chapter and more importantly it tells me nothing about the main story. What is going to happen? No fucking idea.

Even worse, what is the point in spending an entire chapter giving information the main character and then talking it all away? It makes the whole chapter seem like a pointless waste of time.

The summary sounded interesting but the first chapter killed that interest by being a confusing mess.

hmm hes kinda bit of a pussy and an Idoit isint he ?