Calling him Tommon Baratheon instead of waters...

Nice to see Dany and Daeron united.

Something cathartic about sticking it to all the Lannisters. But a blood feud sets a bad precident. Every lord will be thinking it fasionable to declare blood feuds. Ah well, it's just fantasy.

Yeeesh, well if that's what it takes to defeat the dead..

Excellent speech

Don't mention when you split a chapter!

That only brings disapointment to your readers and what we don't know, we can't be upset about!

Baelish's anger being directed at the Starks instead of Lord Hoster Tully never made sense to me!

Lord Hoster is the only one that could agree os disagree to any match for his children afterall.

Love the end oh fuck

Overall it was an average story but I doubt I will ever reread it. I would have been harsher but the ending added many things lacking from the rest of the story and gave it a solid conclusion. Too much of the story is just one long revenge arc with a very limited assortment of scene types and four or so different types of internal monologue from many points of view. That lead to a very samey feel for the majority of the chapters. The locations changed over time but the tone, what was happening, and the characters themselves where basically just copy paste. While I wouldn't call this story bad I also wouldn't recommend it, there are better SI stories and there are better john/dany stories. Even thinking about those tags makes me realize how one note this story really is. Many time while reading and for long stretches I would forget that is even was a SI story because it hardly ever mattered or came up in the story. As far as the pairing goes it doesn't materialize until the very end of the story and is only rarely commented on in any form before that. TLDR: find something better.

youve made lyra out to be a bratty little kunt instead of the proud warrior she was in the show

I have done the same when I get snagged with writer's block about a specific story. I get new plot Bunnys for other stories. I put them safely in google docs to see if later they will turn into story.

while daeron is a good name, i dont really find it a strong name. maybe jaehaerys, daemon or maybe even aerion

An amazing fic !

gran historia, gran final

Did he capture Jaime?

Please don't have Jon end up with Daenerys