Hello, I want to tell you that this story is great and I love how you designed the personality of each character that to me seems pretty close to canon. I hope to see more updates in the near future.

I hope you will continue this story soon. It really great in my opinion although I feel that you killed Emiya archer a little too quickly.

Another good story bit the dust, I guess.

um you do know that while saber alter is slow, her sword swings at the speed of light. Although I like the fanfic

Thanks for the chapter! Hope you continue writing this

This has got to be one of my most favorite story of type moon fanfiction I have no doubt that Mash and Shirou will be having a serious conversation one of these chapters considering their personalities.

Shiro seemed a bit off but then I remembered that he is in his mid-late twenties after having spent time as an enforcer. So he's probably seen some messed up stuff since the grail war even by his standards. Still... can't wait for the next chapter.

No idea who that girl is, whether an OC or an NPC from the singularity I totally forgot about. Hope it's not Jean, as a servant she would be able to communicate just fine.

Also been googling the age thing of mash, since it's, more or less, real time when the game begins. She is 15 in JP servers, but because their isn't any edits, and it's a small point, in the American servers which takes place 2 years later she is 17.

Personally I liked the idea of her being 17, because when you combine that with the fact that in both servers her life expectancy is around 18, it really raises the stakes and makes the final battle really important. Considering the events of the singularities takes roughly a year give or take a few months.

I think the exact answer was given in the Cosmos prologue, but I forgot. Anyways, when you view her at being at the end of her life that final battle really has a whole different context.

I can't belive I just realized this but Rin is pregnant isn't she

Me being a frenchie, i cannot help but completely laugh at the poor quality of french used even if i suppose you can use the excuse of either
"heh its old french who cares" or "heh she just woke up who cares" , and i really have no idea what " 'cite" means because its likely some sort of abreviation but definitly not a single word i can attempt to put in context works at replacing it.
Totally unrelated, its QUITE obvious its not Jeanne d'Arc and more than likely Jeanne ALTER because i absolutely laughed at the "Connards" before realising that the "true" Jeanne would never swear especially swear at someone else that she doesnt even know.

I dunno about why some people call Shirou hypocritical or says he isnt acting like a Shirou does, 27 years old Shirou is one that was either close to his death as savior, or simply had differant circonstances because this one was far more involved in the moonlit world.
Either way so long as he got extanted contact with Archer in the 5th grail war (which He did since thats more than likely the UBW route if he is with Rin), and partially gives up on his ideals to stay with the one he loves, he can definitly become as hypocritical as Archer and partly as cynical no problem.

Mash... ofc Mash would act differantly in a manner thats not like her, sshe isnt facing a young master that has little to no idea of the moonlit world and relies heavily on her for about everything till they got servants to help out, she is facing a Holy Grail war Veteran, who can summons Noble Phantasm at will and fight Servants nearly on equal terms as normal human, meanwhile she is still insecure about not knowing her identity as Demi Servant and cang properly summon her own NP, as green as a servant level entity could be.
Its quite harder to feel any kind of confidence or act like yourself when the figure you look up too is simply more experienced and knowledgeable on over 80% of the things you can do.
Her specialty should now be facing servants as demi servant znd a normal human is litteraly more efficient at that what more do one need to feel bad

Shirou needs to chill a little with Mash.

Thx for the upfate. I love how this does not follow fgo.

It might be considered canon But I dont like it or like what they did to my favorite servant. Its cool that we can see how other servants might look like though. But swimsuit Artoria in the throne of hero? SCREW YOU DREAMWORK FOR CHEAPING HEROES LEGEND WITH OVER THE TOP FAN SERVICE!

Also. Jeanne sure has a potty mouth. But yellow iris so I guess its witch Jeanne. But for now her behaviour is still quite 'docile' so in transition between saint to witch?

I dunno how Shirou can even breathe when all that hypocrisy should be choking him, lol.

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Good Chapter