Your writing talent is truly remarkable, and your story left a deep impression on me. I’d love the chance to chat about it. I’m a commission-based digital artist with experience turning amazing stories into captivating comics. I believe your story has incredible potential, and I’d be thrilled to explore that with you.
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I came across your work "The Kind Freak" and love the depth and diversity of the characters and world I believe it would make a fantastic comic and I’d love to help bring it to life

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Hello! I wanted to say how much I admire your writing—it’s truly captivating. I think your story has incredible potential for a comic adaptation, and I’d love to help bring that vision to life.

I’m a commission-based digital artist who collaborates with authors to create visually stunning comics. If this idea resonates with you, I’d be thrilled to discuss the project further.

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Story is alright, needs more fleshing out. There are more interactions with Tim than you have with Damien, it’s like you just forgot about him entirely, especially when they came to Gotham together. Even though we know Ammon is a clone, you barely established him and his wants and needs. It felt more like you just introduced him and put him on a team with the yj members, and even that period was short, cause apparently he’s a justice league member now? That was blown over quick like it didn’t even matter.

You need pov titles written whenever you start a new chapter/paragraph with someone that’s not the mc if the settings change. I think I’ve only seen it once or twice, but it needs to be written every time so we don’t have to skim through the lines just to understand who’s thinking or talking. Also you should always keep a character talking in the same paragraph, then when the next person talks you create a new paragraph, that’ll help the story flow better and not cause confusion.

Grammar is just very average. The way it reads seems like an amateur wrote this, to be fair I’m not expecting perfection, just better written. I’m sure you can read a book and see how an author writes and use google for any word you’re not sure of. This is a biased opinion, but the ‘freak’ nickname is really dumb. You could’ve chosen waaay better for a vigilante name. He sounds like a sex offender or a c-tier villain that robs peoples clothes and virginity, it’s lame as hell.

Overall I’ll give this story a 6.5/10, has potential to be really good, but the author needs to do some rework and more edits, more context in the beginning, and the interactions between mc and other characters could be fleshed out way better too. Show not tell, you tend to just say this guy did this and that bla bla bla, explain what’s going on through actions instead of statements.

While changing Match is fine, what happened to the Kara from Season 4 of Young Justice?

I want to like the story, I want to like the characters.
The plot threads are interesting, intriguing even. The basis is cool, and I like how characters interact and develop.

But the writing is just so, damn, bad.

Stop telling me "the character felt bad and then they did this", show me through characters acting the scene out. Stop talking directly to the reader in a fucked up second person perspective trying to be first person with third person knowledge. Stop chopping up the story to "and then cool thing I like happened, shame you didn't see it." and "they're totally even better now due to all this training they did, off screen." I haven't seen these characters actually do anything outside of these little three sentence moments of action, everything else is you just telling the audience "cool stuff is happening, be amazed, look at how cool my character is."

You have good ideas and good premise, but you need to let the story flow instead of trying to do so fucking much in as few words as possible.

Aww, that moment with Cass was cute. Hoping to see some more like that

Kinda anticlimactic with One... still, it's DC so there's no shortage of other foes to choose from. And I do agree with you, Cass is not really in a place where a relationship would be good. Although, nothing wrong with some harmless fluff and a close friendship for now

like Ammon's relationship with Cassandra

nice

Ayyy a Cass PoV

Loved it, wish he'd spent a bit more time in LA but im sure he'll get back at some point, great omake too, also i know you said early on that hes not gonna be major tier powerful but i am hoping he gets some strong magic stuff dnd style.

thanks for the chapter

And as always Cassie is the best

Not bad, mate. Not bad at all