good job.

Thanks

This was a very interesting "what if" scenario that has interesting implications for this world going forward, particularly what's going to happen with a sapient, organized population of dragons dominating the north of the world.

I think you kept the narrative very focused in its exploration of magic and Jon Snow's destiny. I think it suffered a bit in actually making the memorable little character moments that breathe real life into a narrative-which was a bit less common here. I'm talking about the little life moments, the meetings with friends, celebrations, or oddball little events good or bad that make up life, but still. Overall? I'm very impressed. THis story executed its what if wonderfully. Valyria was a bit overly endorsed considering what it did, but I think Jon Snow was just very focused on the practicalities rather than morality of things, and he admits that too.

Overall, a very fun fic, although one I might have broken up into chapters. I mean, nothing wrong with a 40k one shot, but several smaller chapters might be more easily digestible for readers.

This smells of wish fullfilment and Jon Sue.
You could elaborated on his journeys, but it wasn't the style from the beginning, so it checks out.
As does the plot.

I liked it.
I just wished you would've any mention of the other Tergaryens fate.
Perhaps some dragons will move into the burning wastes and gobble up all Dothraki.

This story was an interesting read! I greatly enjoyed reading it, but my only gripe would be that the dialogue seemed a bit wooden and robotic.

Very nice. Thank you for sharing this.

A really good story, once again!

The writing and characters were really well done, and the way you weaved the plot line was great. Unfortunately, the rest of your stories are either snippets, unfinished, or Naruto stories (I don't dislike them, but I'm just not in the mood for Naruto right now).

This is one of your three I have read and liked, but second by order. The first one was the crossover with GoT and the third one was the more observant and overall smarter Harry Potter rebuilding his House.

I hope you will write a few more stories, maybe even crossovers.

Thanks for your stories and I am hoping for a few new ones when you have the inspiration.

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Interesting job transitioning out of the whole "gamer" thing once it served its purpose, as well as weaving it into the lore.

Your fast paced stories always leaves me satisfied and yearning for more at the same time. Thank you for a finished story.

Great fanfic, probably the best non-crossover I have read. I also learnt the word 'nuncle' is an actual word and not just a typo.

This must be about the longest one shot anyone has ever done, or nearly at least. Well done actually finishing a story. Well done in adapting the “gamer” concept to Westeros in a logical way. Thanks for writing and thanks for sharing your work.

a great story missing a great battle of army against army and some points of view of other characters.

Love it!

Hahahahahah! What a way to get rid of Ramsay without actually getting rid of Ramsay!