Reviews for The First Pillar |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Ur telling me uraraka beat toga? Yeah ok |
![]() ![]() ![]() "if they weren't dating by the time U starts, he'd eat nezu" i laughed o hard at that |
![]() ![]() ![]() ok i wanted to come and say can't izuku shoot pockets of air with is Field to increase his punches when i randomly remembered this fic but turns out i am late but I'm putting a new suggestion heavy staff for ochako or giant hammer which she uses a quirk to make lighter it will be difficult to master but worth it sorry if what am typing makes no sense am currently in a brain slump where my brain hurts nd refuses to work except i random falshes whoch s starting to where of Isaac |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wonder if anyone will have time to action anything in time for the internships. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Awesome af fic! I really wanna see what happens next! Hurry up with the next chapters! Lol |
![]() ![]() ![]() And another writer with a "harems are challenging obsession". Sad, really. Even after witnessing it so many times before. I think you are good. Solid. You have a natural flow with words too. So you're not perfect, but good. Harems always leave a bad taste, because even if writing them can be difficult (yeah this chapter immediately blemished your writing style as soon as the subject started off) your readers will from that point on consist to 7/8 of 14 years old boys who have to read this one-handed. Probably not the best critics, but who knows? They are also the only ones who can read this without feeling disgust everytime an adult women drops a hint of being into a teenager. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Damn this story really reminds me of “Metallurgy“ another mha fanfic with quirk deku and fem bakugou. Obviously Im only on the first chapter so I might be entierly wrong but Im really enjoying it so far. And im loving that word count hahah. The last update was pretty recently too so there might even be more later on, which is always great. |
![]() ![]() ![]() That mf random doctor at the start of every mha story is the equivalent of truck kun in a isekai story. Man is always on demon time. Bro does NOT hold back. He dont care about no kid. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thanks for the recap it's been a while also can't wait for the next chapter |
![]() ![]() I have really been enjoying this story. This is less a comment on the chapter and more heres a fun fact it caused me to learn and I want to share. The saying "room and board", that you used at the begginning of the chapter, means a place to sleep and food to eat. Room is the sleeping portion and board is the eating portion. Evidently, board was a way of saying table. So inns would offer room and board or part of payment could be room and board or board depending on the positions. This is the way board is being used for not only "room and board" but also "boardgame", "above board", "board room", "board of _", and "Chairman/chairwoman of the board". Thanks for causing me to learn this fun fact. |
![]() ![]() Is still creepy seeing how someone changes the gender of characters in order for the fictional characters to have sex because of the author need to satisfy their weird fetishes. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow, you just made me eat my review from the last chapter in the first paragraph. Instantly addressing the only problem I had with the last chapter right out of the gate. As always I love the attention to detail with the romantic scenes. I especially liked the part with Mei, the way you highlighted how even though she was confused and pent up she didn’t just suddenly become lost to her hormones. And how you highlighted that even though she doesn’t mind being intimate with Himiko she isn’t exactly attracted to her. It happens so often in a harem story where a girl who never showed any interest in women suddenly becomes bisexual just because the person she likes is with other women. You’ve done a fantastic job on that so far, having some people be into both while others are only into Izuku, and even those who aren’t into girls can appreciate the beauty of their own gender. You had Himiko explain it best when she was talking to the other girls. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ok I want to start this by saying I don’t dislike this chapter, it has the same amazing quality as the others, but there was one thing that really stood out to me that I wasn’t a fan of. That being how Himiko was able to not only switch between forms practically instantly but how it didn’t seem like she is suffering any of the drawbacks of the quirks she is using. Now I’m not saying that it wasn’t set up because it was, you are very on top off making sure most things are properly explained and hashed out. Also with how serious and how long she and Izuku have trained for I understand that she has the upper hand on most of her classmates. I’m just saying that it kinda came of as super op and almost like it was ignoring the drawbacks of her quirk and of those she turns into. Best example being Mina and her acid and Ochako and her zero gravity. Both have some potentially serious drawbacks like if she made too corrosive of an acid or she got severe nausea. Now one could argue that she only used it for a few seconds so it wouldn’t be that substantial but with all the quirks she used they would all start to add up. Since there wasn’t any mention of her feeling any of those drawbacks it just made it look like she was almost untouchable. I hope this doesn’t come off as too negative, it’s just a few thoughts I had. Keep up the great work and thanks for the chapter. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love the little author notes you put at the end. Always nice to hear and always make me smile. This was a good chapter and I like the things you changed and the reasons you gave for them. Of course I like the cute/funny moments (like the part at the end with Izuku and katsuki and especially all mights reaction to it) but that’s just obvious at this point. I also like what you said with not having the story be a crossover just because you use a few characters from another medium. You said it in an early chapter too but I didn’t comment on it but I liked it then too. I’ve noticed that some people, when making a story, start making things to complicated by trying to bring everything from the other universe when they could make it nice and simple and just have the only thing from the other universe be the character themselves. Keep up the good work and thanks for the update. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Seriously this chapter was a roller coaster of awesomeness, I can’t even list all the stuff I liked but some of the key things are the crystal/stone talk, the character development, and most importantly Izuku personality. Firstly, I love rocks and crystals and have made a hobby out of working with them. Seeing how they are described is sometimes a little confusing without visuals but I love how it speaks to a personal passion of mine and make me feel even more invested in the story. Secondly, the investment and care you are putting into the characters is amazing. Their quirks(personality) and their angsts, the way they act and interact with each other just breaths life into them in a griping and unique way. Lastly I especially like how your Izuku is, all the new things about him just mesh so well with his canon self. Something I’ve never liked is how when people make a story and make a whole bunch of changes to Izuku’s story they lose track of his core character, but so far you have done a great job of blending the new with the old and I just love it. Best example I can come up with is how even with Izuku gaining more confidence in himself his personality still shines brightly through. Like how he is still quick to cry when he gets emotional and how he still gets all nervous when interacting with people but when it matters he gains this strength that helps him keep moving forward, things that are just part of who he is. Thanks for the great chapter and keep up the great work. |