Reviews for Blindfolds and Broom Closets
TupanHD chapter 1 . 7/23/2021
This needs a continuation.
Jimmy V chapter 1 . 5/19/2021
Holy sh*t, that was spicy! Looking forward to reading more of your works!

Not sure if you're writing a sequel, but if there was something akin to a role reversal, Potter trapping Runcorn in a broom closet for some consensual fun could be extra spicy!
Smutley Do-Wrong chapter 1 . 5/1/2021
It was thick and wavy, and she seemed to realize instantly that it was dangerous for him to know that.

She pushed him away. "Don't."

"Sorry."

Tweak: he simply winds couple of her head hairs around fingers of one hand as an anchor so it doesn't pull on follicle of the scalp as he winds same hairs around fingers of other hand, pulls, hairs break and has a finger ring of hair.

Future: polyjuice IDs the witch.
Obviously a slower ID for a sequel.

Tweak 2

Get's out map sooner, more smoothly ensures there's no doubt it's Runcorn.
Borrow the magic gag of the lumos lit wand without holding it. (Dudley & Dementors, book 5).
Only seen ONE fic that expands the hell out of THAT weird gag of casting a spell thru a wand while NOT holding the wand.

Watching most of the witch's journey from
nearby corridor or THE closet's corridor, gives IMO, provides timeline segment for filler made of additional introspective thought narrative while watching her travel to her dorm.

2 blow jobs for underwear:
Unless giving Harry-head, part of the underwear item for the scavenger hunt. He might ponder about reasons, "why the fellatio?", one possible reason, that the witch is strongly sexually attracted to him.
Plus, if she doesn't just prefer dressing commando style (sans panties). Harry might ponder THAT, regarding what happened.

Omake or sequel outlines:
Crossing paths on train, Hogsmead, Hogwarts hall, or in an owl letter.

Dear Samantha Runcorn...
If you want to collect a first payment on the unpaid debt ... I owe you two cunnilingus orgasms. Or with interest on the debt, two sessions of cunnilingus.

Tweak 2b: Gryffs dare, so he shadows Runcorn under the Hallows cloak, eavesdrops on group of upper year group of witches walking to breakfast banter, &/or their banter at the Slytherin table during breakfast (option stands NEAR, inside an anti listening charm dome).

Tweak 2c: in that letter, accurately describes perfectly, Runcorn skin (birthmark, mole, etc, of inner thighs, genitalia, derrier, etc; do to option of shadowing group of the witches into prefect baths).

Tweak 3: option Harry eavesdrops or readers get it on page...
Eg. Runcorn refers via euphemism or by scavenger hunt item, to remove from list (yada yada to not bring attention by multiple witches trying to get Harry's underwear.).
? Bonus points for not taking by force?
Banter and teasing about points Runcorn claiming (inverse of drug testing, truth serum verifying scavenger hunt competitor's claims).
Hiya chapter 1 . 4/13/2021
Nice one shot. I’d totally read a whole book on this though haha
Ptool chapter 1 . 4/13/2021
FABULOUS!
major wallace chapter 1 . 4/4/2021
Nice work
Eagleone 55 chapter 1 . 3/9/2021
Another good story Too bad you decided to make it a One shot!
it could have been fun for Harry to be caught many more times by different girls.
Neekah chapter 1 . 3/1/2021
Very nice! Hot! And a little bit hilarious. I wonder what other things are on the scavenger hunt list!
Lord Trump chapter 1 . 1/16/2021
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this story! Keep up the great work!

It was a hot story and I liked it. Perhaps this could be expanded into a story with female domination in it, with multiple girls controlling Harry or Harry and Samantha Runcorn eventually falling in love as the main pair.

You could also set a similar story in Harry's second or third year, with one of the lesser known girls in the Harry Potter world dominating and/or controlling Harry.

Great work!
Evelyn Reese chapter 1 . 1/3/2021
Hot! I know you said it's a one-shot but I hope that it turns into more chapters with Harry ambushing Samantha.
taskmaster130667 chapter 1 . 1/3/2021
Not bad - if it was your story - it may have worked if you have at least used another girls name..
drthvdr chapter 1 . 12/19/2020
daaaamn that was awesome! hoping for a sequel where harry would be the one who would ambush her
Handers chapter 1 . 11/29/2020
Very hot and funny :) I can imagine him suddenly taking the hobby of walking alone before curfew haha
fhl1234 chapter 1 . 11/25/2020
Loved it.
toile grant chapter 1 . 11/24/2020
good
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