Reviews for Optimistic Game: Revised
Guest chapter 1 . 5h
that last scene was fantastic, what a salesman
nater0730 chapter 33 . 2h
Nice story
Imaginationburstingout chapter 33 . 5h
This story carries a lot of potential. What I am worried about is if you are keeping track of everything. An example of this would be you forgetting that Reid had Senzu Beans, Reid only ate 1 after his fight with Fenrir and I’ve never seen or heard Senzu Beans mentioned again.
While I understand that the above paragraph isn’t a strong example, it is an example nonetheless. So far, you haven’t forgotten any of the multiple items that you’ve given Reid.
Another thing that personally bothered me would be Reid’s golem creation moments. Giving information to us readers is nice but when the information is too much, you could bet I’ll be skimming through most of the information.
My personal advice, should you take it or not, is to show us information that is only important at that particular moment. For instance, you could have told us the strength of the Molten Golem during the battle of Skov’les and not before. That way, readers could understand the significance of the Molten Golem and won’t simply skim through.

That is all I have to say, great story and with that being said, I bid you adieu.
Peace~
Reader 451 chapter 33 . 9/22
Spooky Grimm Forest part wasn't too bad. Honestly it would have made for a better horror-style Grimm than we got in Volume 6. Apathy weren't bad, just weren't utilized well in my opinion. The Tree Grimm were better because they got in the heads of their prey, kind of like the Wraith from Stargate Atlantis, hell they even hung their victims and slowly consumed them as well. Kinda nightmare fuel worthy. If anyone has been in the middle of the wilderness off the beaten path knows it gets freaky as fuck at night. I don't know how many times I would see shapes in the dark and hear things that weren't there, then decide "Screw it, if Jason wants my head that badly, he's gonna have to eat a couple .357", then go to sleep. lol
Guest chapter 33 . 9/22
She can't handle this type of situation with ruby
Uday Sra chapter 33 . 9/23
Awesome. Please update soon
Ricee chapter 33 . 9/22
pshhh lots of people like angst. not me tho
Re Lovely Lover chapter 33 . 9/22
A great story.
CILinkz chapter 33 . 9/22
Now that ruby had xxx before yang she can rub it in what a virgin sister she has haha
JKingSniper chapter 33 . 9/22
Dnt worry Yang
You'll join with your sister
meahahahha
JKingSniper chapter 33 . 9/22
Good
hate angst in so many fanfic
JKingSniper chapter 32 . 9/22
Nice smut though I gotta be in the mood for these parts
Redery chapter 26 . 9/22
Hope he doesn't take all the glory again for killing a titan lol
adam110902 chapter 33 . 9/22
great chapter
Lechuzape chapter 33 . 9/22
poor Yang, I hope she found her happiness...
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