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hehehe... My good lord this is so entertaining.
I love it.
Well done.
Thank you.

WHAT THE ACTUAL FUQ

Wtf is this sex slave thing
:(

Well... The chapter gave a sort of satisfactory explanation to basically every odd thing so far that was missing. And it was as always well written. BUT! It's still stalling horribly. The story hasn't really progressed since he got Sirius back in what? Chapter 7? Something like that.

Oh there have been hints about what's happening outside, but decisve progress has not yet been made. It's mostly like they're living in vacuum, or alternative dimension. We need the story to start progressing, otherwise none of all this build-up will ever come to mean anything.

Where magical cores really a thing before this chapter tho? Usually not so fond of that simplified take on it all... It goes so heavily against canon, in such a direct manner - It leaves it almost unrecognizeable.

I really hope you stopped overdescribing things in later chapters. As it is, I am skipping over half the words.

Yep .. Special K the 15 year old burn victim that he keeps calling "a big score"
there is D/s and there is Rape .. guess which one this is ...

The Obedience stat and the whole Sex Slave thing is just soo soooo wrong...

A hallmark, of a gamer-lite fic done right, is how... organic it all feels. The sense that, with the limited interface provided to the MC, the MC is forced to interact with the situation with a realistic outlook and thought-process. You, dear author, has written such a fic. Well done.

The unique aspect of your fic, is that the MC isn't simply an SI, but more of a naturalized SI, one that is imperfectly integrated into the OC character. Furthermore, although a party system and the dungeon feature do exist, you don't focus on them. Partly because of how the MC's thought process went, but partly so you could bring more focus to the characters and their interactions. It is a given that fantastical elements will be prevalent, but you've managed to mix it together with exposition and character development quite well.

Pace-wise, it's not the fastest or flashiest I've read, but it sure as hell ain't the slowest. So regarding the reader that complained about that, I'd say to ignore him, and just carry on with your own flow.

Do carry on with your writing. I look forward to how the twisted relationship between the 3 of them play out. And how MC's eventual involvement (in the eyes of the WW and Dumbledore himself) will go. Great job with the fic.