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You balance magic and the force very well! Good read!

Oh please love of god dont give Luna more potential than the chosen one who was littrialy conceived by the force

Bloody hell if moldyshorts uses the touture curse on him I can imagine it feeding the darkside in him he won't stand a chance against full pot anakin

This was quite... different. Thank you for the interesting read.

Emotion, yet Peace. Definitely warming up to this one.

Hmm. Okay, we're seeing more of Anakin's distinct personality. That's better. I'm warming up to this one, though in places it still seems a little... trite? Perhaps a matter of personal preference.

A fragmented Darth Nihilus as the Dementors. That's very intriguing. I'm impressed.

Hmm.

Okay, this is interesting. The writing is technically good, but there's a few problems. Unusual choice to go with Sebastian Shaw's older Anakin, especially since Hayden Christensen shows more or less how Anakin would have naturally aged, but I can go with it. Old Man Anakin also sounds a bit much like Obi-Wan. It's hard to pick out a voice that's distinctly his. However, the 'hit me if you can' thing is inspired and very Anakin's style.

Luna as a Force User is very interesting, and it makes a great deal of sense. However, dropping her in the deep end of Jedi and Sith, especially since Light and Dark are far more than that, as the ex Chosen One would KNOW? Hmm.

There's quite a few Americanisms in here - gym, over here, is called PE (Physical Education), or Sports. Hogwarts has no such thing, which you partially address, but even so. And 'darndest'

Lucius is depicted as a bit too reasonable, a bit too genuinely concerned - though the monster is still there, so that's not too much of a problem, difference of opinion. And almost never is only one point taken away, if I'm going to nitpick.

Ravens, Snakes, Lions... all fanon names.

Finally, the definition of the Jedi is a bit simplistic, since the Jedi have been many things in their history. The early code for children, sometimes referred to as the old code, for instance, holds 'Emotion, yet Peace'. There were a lot of Jedi marriages and relationships, too, both in the old Republic era, and in the Imperial/post-Imperial era. That's in both Disney Canon and the old EU.

You're also trying to run some things a little too fast.

It's decent, don't get me wrong. I just feel it's a diamond in the rough.

Thank you - this is a lovely story. I wondered, too, about how Anakin got here (and physically restored), but with the supernatural, anything is possible.

In some ways, this story didn't have the dramatic tension of canon (either Harry Potter or Star Wars) because Anakin was so obviously up to dealing with it. Rather than being, like Luke or Harry, an untrained teenager who has to learn for himself how to defeat overwhelmingly powerful evil (either because his school doesn't have an adequate teacher or because there are barely any Jedi left), he's an experienced magic knight facing what, by the standards of the Harry Potter world, are Level 2 encounters. And, as an adult and a teacher, he has more chance of being listened to than Harry does.

I had wondered whether Anakin would face either more internal spiritual and emotional conflict, or more hostility from the British wizarding world and especially the teachers at Hogwarts, if any of them find out about his past. I can see Snape being extremely hostile, not just because he is jealous that Anakin Skywalker is the first person to manage to hold down the Defence Against Dark Arts job for more than a year, but because he is worried that Anakin might pose a threat to the students. After all, he has already had to deal with one colleague becoming possessed by Voldemort and trying to murder a first-year student - how much more is there to be worried about in a colleague who had massacred all the children at another school? (Whatever else you can say about Snape, he is fiercely protective of the children under his care, no matter how much he loathes them.)

Alternatively, it'd be cool to see a story in which Severus Snape and Anakin Skywalker become friends and realise how much they have in common. I have in mind a story I might write one day, a prequel to The Broken Droids Repair Workshop, in which, in the afterlife, Severus Snape and Sergeant Konstantine Bothari (from the Miles Vorkosigan stories) are given responsibility for looking after Anakin after he turns up in the afterlife badly injured.

Still, looking at your story - this isn't so much a 'that would be too easy if grown-ups were there to deal with the problems' as 'this is what SHOULD have happened, if Hogwarts had been able to hire and keep a competent Defence Against Dark Arts teacher'. Anakin, as someone who had fought in a war at the age of nine, then been brought up in an educational system where it is normal for young people to start Padawan training while barely adolescent, and then commanded battalions of soldiers who were chronologically only ten years old, doesn't underestimate either children's abilities or the danger they may be facing, but he isn't going to leave them to face it alone.

I wonder what it was like for him adjusting to whole-class teaching - and one class after another after another, all day for five days out of seven, plus lesson preparation and marking. Hogwarts is much more short-staffed than most muggle secondary schools, with only one teacher per subject for a school of around 600 pupils, and I suspect (as I suggested in my story Time Out Of Mind) that some of the staff must be using time travel just to cover the workload! Since both Jedi and Sith normally train apprentices on a one-to-one basis, being a full-time schoolteacher AND taking on Luna as a Padawan must have taken some getting used to.

'Nothing like his beloved master Regulus, his beloved late master.' Considering that they've found Regulus's locket, thankfully without Dumbledore or anyone except Death Eaters dying in this AU, I wish someone had had time to explain to both Kreacher and Sirius about Regulus. But probably nobody thought Sirius would have wanted to hear anything about his late unlamented (except by Kreacher) brother, and hardly anybody thinks to talk to house-elves at all. Even Hermione, though she cares about liberation for house-elves, doesn't really have any elf friends, because they regard her as a patronising, interfering human who just doesn't get it, and in this AU, the friendship between Harry and Dobby seems not to have sprung up. Fred and George seem to get on fairly well with elves, but only as friendly Hogwarts staff whom they can scrounge snacks off, rather than close friends.

Harry in this version doesn't have as much reason to hate Kreacher, since Kreacher hasn't killed Sirius, but when Harry takes an instant dislike to someone (as with Snape) he tends to go on hating them and makes no effort to try to be friendly. I'd have thought that, living in the Blacks' house and seeing how unpleasant Sirius is to Kreacher, he would remember what it was like for him living with the Dursleys, and might feel sympathy for Kreacher and try to be kind to him. But (a) this would mean thinking badly of Sirius, so it's more comfortable for him to tell himself that Kreacher is a horrible person and doesn't deserve kindness, and (b) Kreacher actually is a horrible person (understandably considering what a screwed-up life he's had) and wouldn't be likely to respond well if Harry did try to be nice to him, which wouldn't provide much encouragement to Harry to persevere. Hermione makes more effort to go on being kind to all house-elves (even Kreacher) than she does with humans she doesn't like, precisely because she sees elves as less than human (though she would deny this, of course) and makes allowances for them. Harry, who sees elves neither as worthless slaves nor as pathetic victims but just as people like himself, likes some elves and hates others, just as he would if they were human.

'Is wanting to be free of desire not also a desire?' Good point - I remember this coming up in GCSE Religious Studies, studying Buddhism, when I was about fifteen.

I love seeing a Luna-centric story for a change, and the friendship between Luna and Anakin. Luna being different because she's Force-sensitive rather than merely a witch makes a lot of sense. (Being a witch/wizard seems to be more common - after all, probably around 1 in 10,000 people are witches/wizards if it takes one school to train just the magical children of Britain and Ireland, compared with one Jedi Academy for a whole galaxy.)

Seeing Luna being so aggressive is scary, though. In the books, she is one of the gentlest characters, shrugging off being bullied without either showing distress or retaliating. But then, in the books we don't meet her until she is around fourteen - here, we have a first-year Luna, away from home for the first time, and probably going to school for the first time (there don't seem to be any wizarding primary schools, so the implication is that most pure-blood wizards homeschool their children up to the age of eleven).

It's worrying that even to people who care about house-elves (recognise them as people, even if they don't assume that house-elves necessarily want the same things out of life as humans do) don't consider killing gnomes to be murder. Not even Luna, in this version, apparently.

This was a truly lovely story, and you have wrapped it up with the perfect use of the Sith code. Well done friend, well done.

Very nice! Thank you for writing this and sharing it with us. I enjoyed your take on how the Force could work at Hogwarts, etc, and I loved the friendships and relationships between the students, and the professors/other adults.