|Reviews for Brockton bay s resident Angel|
| I'm Halping chapter 1 . 6/1/2022
There are some pretty serious structural issues here. Poor word choice, sentence structure, the building of paragraphs. Basic grammar and story structure. Second, I'd guess that you're very young or inexperienced, because the story as you've told it speaks of a fundamental lack of understanding of how people interact as adults, and how law enforcement works, as well as a very...immature view of morality. Third, it feels almost as if you've never read the source material.
If you are serious about writing, I think you would greatly benefit from joining a writing group or forum that can provide strenuous, real constructive criticism to aid you with your basic grammar, and give you some pointers on writing in general.
| Spelloyal chapter 19 . 1/9/2022
Thanks for the chapter. It's kind of inconvenient for Taylor not to be able to maintain a 100% human form or curl his wings, but it's definitely worth it in exchange for that power.
If I'm not mistaken, hadn't Uriel flamed Taylor clean after she asked? Shouldn't she be clean?
| Greyff chapter 3 . 12/29/2021
looks like the 4th paragraph from the end of this chapter was truncated and moved from the end of the third to last paragraph.
| WildFreedom chapter 19 . 12/23/2021
Not gonna lie, love the story but there are a ton of typos.
| jdboss1 chapter 19 . 12/2/2021
Pretty good story
You idea that racism is worse than sex slavery is laughable
Yes the empire certainly bad but then not that bad compared to the other gangs
The idea that the angel would have a problem with them is laughable
having you read the Bible
that's the most racist piece of tripe I've ever read
Racism is the least of your worries when reading the Bible
The idea of the PRT would allow a suspected murderer no a confessed murderer walk free that easily
she is a suspect in over several killings and any prosecutor would be jumping at the heels the prosecutor her
She may have been able to use the self defence of 1/3 party in using deadly force to pintail she confessed to having the person
at her mercy
And if there's one thing I know about the United States
they hate the idea that they would allow this is laughable
yes they can use the argument she's too strong to politically important
but I would expect they would definitely press charges and as part of the punishment plea laid down by an actual court
to serve her time instead of prison under the supervision of the state
| JanessaVR chapter 19 . 11/17/2021
Hmmm...Cauldron saw something last chapter. I wonder what their plans for Taylor are.
| Slayerseba chapter 19 . 11/17/2021
| Guest chapter 19 . 11/17/2021
| Jctherebel chapter 19 . 11/17/2021
| DragonsBC chapter 18 . 10/16/2021
You have an enjoyable story here. I cannot wait to see where you are going from here. Thank you for your hard work.
| Grimm Magician chapter 4 . 10/14/2021
A "Nephalem" is a half-angel/half-demon.
A "Nephilim" is a half-mortal/half-angel.
| KongoBongo chapter 15 . 10/13/2021
yea the PRT, well sorry for Dragon as she is chained to her fate as well, looking forward to more
| KongoBongo chapter 12 . 10/13/2021
GG good for her, cannon wise she is an absolute monster really, but like the more reasonable and sane GG :) look forward to more
| KongoBongo chapter 8 . 10/13/2021
very good story looking forward to more
| Guest chapter 18 . 10/12/2021
What the Bible actually says angels actually look like
Eye covered interlocking wheels Ophanim
Ox/eagle/lion/human faced four wings hooves Cherubim
six wings covered in eyes two wings covering face two covering legs Seraphim