Reviews for The White Snake - ENGLISH VERSION
KnellaLuna chapter 2 . 3/25
I can’t even read this… very interesting concept, but terrible grammar
White Fire the Dragon chapter 9 . 12/10/2022
Wow. After all this time. I grew to love this fanfiction pretty much the day I discovered it after watching the animatic. The ending nearly brought me to tears. Thank you for making this.
Atea1793 chapter 9 . 12/5/2022
This was a great ending to one of the best Lila expose stories I've ever read and I'm proud to have it in my community dedicated to such stories revealing that evil Mary-Sue for the monster she is!

But the way it's written is still... problematic to say the least. The dialogue is really clunky in several areas, the grammar throughout the story isn't good (especially with all those unnecessary hyphens in asking the dialogue instead of quotation marks), and several words are mixed up. These problems make reading this otherwise good story rather... difficult to say the least.

It would be a good idea to get a Beta Reader to look through the chapters and help clear up these problems. Fanfiction actually has a section here where you can find fellow authors that offer their services.

No, you don't have to pay any money for their help if that's what your worried about. Though I do recommend getting a beta reader that's into the Miraculous fandom to avoid any confusion about the details.

I also recommend using the desktop version of the site. The Beta Reader section is unfortunately one of the features that the admin left out of the mobile site.

Despite those problems, this is still an awesome story!
Kenka chapter 9 . 12/5/2022
David Case chapter 8 . 5/22/2022
"In the pantheon of sins, murder is far more honorable than betrayal."

-Slade Wilson, A.K.A. Deathstroke.
K.I. Hernandez chapter 8 . 5/22/2022
awww man...I knew her death was inevitable but I'm still sad because of this. I already miss white snake!
SoundVenom chapter 8 . 3/22/2022
RIP white snake.
Guest chapter 5 . 3/20/2022
Love it

Can you please do marichat tooo please
Neros Urameshi chapter 8 . 3/19/2022
Excellent work on this!

Rest in peace, White Snake... you will be missed. At least everything's back to normal... except for the villains who deserve to be cursed.

Keep going!
cyiusblack chapter 8 . 3/17/2022
update soon
libros5 chapter 8 . 3/16/2022
“were a lifeline, "After all, she was your sentimonster.”"
The last sentence is cut off. Poor White Snake. But she fixed so many wrongs
Guest chapter 1 . 3/9/2022
It good
Mermaid's Magic chapter 7 . 2/16/2022
I am loving this story, and looking forward to reading more chapters...

Please, pretty please, tell me you are going to add more chapters soon, it's been a while...

then again I'm one to talk... and with the crap that's been going on in the world,

yeah, no,

update and add chapters when you feel like it, but please make sure to take care of yourself and your family and stay safe!
Face Yourself chapter 2 . 2/14/2022
Why switch from normal writing with quote marks, to something unreadable with hyphens for dialogue?
speedster101 chapter 7 . 1/11/2022
I expected some better punishments for the accused instead of them being deaf for a year then again it seems fitting since they’re still young, I hope they learn from this and would stop them from believing the words of some Italian girl they barely know.
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