Reviews for Invictus
ZhaWarudo chapter 44 . 12/2/2022
plotholes, you said using another's fingers for hand seals requires overpowering their chakra,. same for sticking to another person's skin.
You forgot that naruto wanted to tell kakashi about weasel
Guest chapter 51 . 11/30/2022
Rin could one be a diplomat once her yin chakra grows a little more and learns to temper herself. Rin could still end up nanadaime hokage one day because of her actions going forward and surpassing naruto even if she never intends to do so. She won’t live in naruto’s shadow forever. Here the thing naruto can’t be hokage forever, or he will become stagnant being in the same position for years on end. Who better to be nanadaime hokage than Rin? Naruto is right there to train his twin to be hokage. This Rin doesn’t dream of being hokage, but some of the best hokages were the ones who didn’t dream and didn’t want to be hokage. It is true Rin lacks a ruthless side, but she would do what is necessary because she has front row seat to the ruthless actions naruto the hokage will take for the world and for konoha and see it is needed. Naruto so far needs to remember teamwork. A lot of battles shows naruto fighting on his own and with orochimaru, naruto begins to see he has only himself to survive when he could have a team at his side to win. Naruto should train Rin as his battle partner. She does have the potential to surpass him in certain areas. Naruto can’t do everything by himself. Rin can and could pick up the slack in a battle that naruto can’t do. Just like naruto can pick up the slack that Rin can’t do. I wish naruto would see Rin a little more clearly. She isn’t a pamper princess who falls apart because she has dirt underneath her nails. She doesn’t need protection. She needs training.
ZhaWarudo chapter 37 . 12/1/2022
thats what he gets for thinking he can delay orochimaru and keeping knowledge to himself, sharing only tidbits.
yeah wait for anbu orochi can kill like newbs in the middle of a jungle, when in canon they havent arrived for hours
Guest chapter 47 . 11/29/2022
What if the prophecy child is not one child but two: naruto and rin together changing the world. Each dimension has its own story and changes that are different from cannon story line. Naruto already forgotten what rikudo sennin tried to teach the world about teamwork and unconditional love creating peace and ninshuu. Naruto is only one half of the prophecy, and rin is the other half. Naruto and rin are like yin and yang of each other and goals. They temper each other and cover other’s weaknesses or balance each others’ weaknesses. Naruto is going off by himself and doing things but rin could be his battle partner instead of someone to protect.
ZhaWarudo chapter 37 . 12/1/2022
omfg the lengths you have your si lie to his friends to delay the secret for a few more days, knowing the secret can't be kept and they wouldn't hate them
Minato sealed Kurama in Naruto to give him a better fighting chance. What can one do without bloodline or bijuu? become a or weak s rank at best, not sss needed to save the world
ZhaWarudo chapter 36 . 12/1/2022
What the fuck is the point of pretending he's not an Uzumaki oe Jinchuriki. It's fucking obvious and B is a good guy who won't start shit in Konoha.
DD-Returns101 chapter 58 . 12/1/2022
I like the pacing. I like the relationships. Run and Sasuke budding into one didn’t fit to me but you’ve developed it really well. Pacing isn’t the best, feel like you giggles down in certain areas. Kinda evident that ur at 800k and haven’t even reached Shippuden yet. However, everything is written well so I can’t complain. Other than that I wish you would hurry it up a bit to get to Shippuden and for Ino/Hinata to finally make a move. Other than that I really enjoy the story and keep up the good work
mt.greek chapter 58 . 11/30/2022
Really love the story and happy to see a new chapter. Interested to see what else you add to the story, I enjoy the extra world building bits you've written.
ZhaWarudo chapter 27 . 11/30/2022
hah no, English is one of the easiest languages, inconsistencies aside
ZhaWarudo chapter 25 . 11/30/2022
I absolutely agree, final arc of Naruto is pointless shonen escalation, coz ofc there's gotta be gods at the end, not just Madara. Also heard bad things about Boruto and wasn't impressed with few episodes I watched.
ZhaWarudo chapter 21 . 11/30/2022
I hope Hinata learns ninjutsu instead of wasting her potential on mere taijutsu which isn't even the best, coz Gai style is the best.
Guest chapter 29 . 11/27/2022
Jiraiya would teach both naruto and rin. He has more fuuin to pass on to the both of them. He has a massive chakra reservoir himself so he can teach more chakra control exercises plus advanced chakra control exercises. He can teach the both of them to use more chakra once they have better chakra control. Chakra control takes years to perfect anyways. And the both of them has tajuu kage bunshin no jutsu to speed up some of their training. Not to much a lot of wisdom to pass to the next generation. This time rin has a strong foundation unlike cannon naruto so she can be pushed to do more. They both can learn more jutsu and kenjutsu from an outside source.
ZhaWarudo chapter 20 . 11/29/2022
This is slightly annoying, why are you spellling A as Ay, when you know B is just B and not Be.
ZhaWarudo chapter 20 . 11/29/2022
Eh why are you repeatedly writing fix instead of make or cook?
ZhaWarudo chapter 19 . 11/29/2022
you said rin burned water, now she likes cooking
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