Ameilia’s a bit of a bitch. How’d she make DMLE head with empathizing skills like that?

When Harry dont even have the Balls to Stand up for what is right and just take the Easy Route becase the System is Corrupt to the Core what a Trash FIC

She is Not mean is is a TOTAL ASSHOLE , that character gets you hit,spit,and shit in your face and harry has no Backbone to just tell her off, this not the Militiary, its a bunch of useless wannabe cops becase thats what aurors are

I love how Lily is just a force of nature

I love how Lily is just a force of nature

Ok you write very well. but one thing really bugged me. it makes absolutely no sense for harry to leave his wand tucked away somewhere away from him (and on a different floor to boot) when he doesn't exactly know what the attackers would do when they come. at the very least, he would store his wand near the door and take it with him whenever he opened the door (after hiding it properly, of course). this would be a significant lack of caution, i think. moody would be livid. probably kick him out of the DMLE completely.

An enjoyable story, with decent writing. Some stuff comes across as clunky, but not too much. 6.5/10

Great story and thanks so much for sharing!

nicely done... refreshing to see the DOM as the bad guys

I tried reading but you really should have added a warning for major character deaths, all the best but I'm out

I dunno why but this whole piece took me COMPLETELY out of the story. I dont even know WHY either. maybe it's because I can tell this is supposed to be the pivotal shift in their relationship or whatever. it honestly feels like it came too early and just kinda outta nowhere. I expected a lot more repercussions for tonks for how she was handling him and instead we got this. ultimately it's YOUR vision but I'm always finding stories just solving things like this quietly and I never get a good angry mc going after the people who wronged em. imma stop ranting now cause it's prolly annoying to read but I just had to say this. I will finish this tho cause h/t is so hard to find good shit for so I gotta read every bit I can find lol

Cool story. Thank you.

Yoooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo!

See, this was the Lily that always felt like head!canon to me. The fierce, and frankly, scary witch. The one who gave up her life to save her son. She straight up clapped unspeakable booty. Amazing.

Honestly, it's a pretty good story. Ginny always seemed like a secondary character at best, and since readers are generally fully behind Harry as a narrative lens, we want the best for him.

Your Tonks i better than most Ginny depictions, and aside from Ginny's Weasley connections, she could easily have been cast aside and it would never have changed the narrative of the original stories. Their relationship also seemed contrived tbh, going from hero worship directly to pining love interest? Yuck. Always had a weird feeling about it.

Either way this story is super interesting because the stakes are so high.

Really good story. The villains are contemptible, the victims tragic. Lily Potter is vicious and brilliant. Harry and Tonks fit, though it would be better if one of them wasn’t with the DMLE.