Reviews for The Legacy of House Ordo |
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![]() ![]() I finally finished this, I've been putting of reading the last three chapters for so long. Great story! Very good. One complaint though: SPOILER AHEAD— Magical's should live up to 150 on average, or even more. Haron aged a bit too quickly and I wish you had more info in the epilogue about his legend |
![]() ![]() ![]() hmmm |
![]() ![]() ![]() I hate to be nitpicky, but I’m just pointing the wrong things out so they could be fixed. “Her eyes rose in surprise” isn’t correct. There are two ways of saying what u wanted to say and u combined them into one which makes it wrong, it’s eitherher eyebrows rose in surprise”, orher eyes widened in surprise.”. On a sidenote, there has been a few instances of you mixing up ‘to’ and ‘too’ it’s nothing major but I thought you might wanna know. |
![]() ![]() ![]() To bare is to strip, to bear is to endure. Also if they have to, not have too. |
![]() ![]() ![]() "Anakin, my boy. The Jedi don't want to make you a Jedi Master" "But Chancellor, I am a Master" "Wait what?" |
![]() ![]() ![]() Love how you've made Palps a drug addiction lol |
![]() ![]() ![]() YESSSSSS I was HOPING for Din to be included in this fic! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm glad that's over...so I can BINGE-READ IT! Too, to, and two are not interchangeable. You keep doing that. Arg. Good for Lady Jessica pulling Paul out of his depression funk... EVENTUALLY! Letting him fester in his own bedroom for two years? What kind of family does that? Irulan should have stormed in there with a baby to force into her hubby's arms after a fortnight AT MOST! Other than those complaints, this is one of the most engaging fics on this site. |
![]() ![]() ![]() damn good story! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Took me forever to get through this because I didn’t want it to end. I’m very impressed and it’s a fantastic story. I Love the love the Mando’ade got. I don’t think they get enough in the cultural aspect and you killed it! Nice job! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I liked it up until you made Dune a galactic backwater. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Here I was thinking the most powerful thing in GEAR is the steroids they give the troops, was just imagining Han going to Sera and getting them to evolve into Han Swolo, or Anakin getting super buff to counter his cybernetic clones. |
![]() ![]() ![]() You know it occurs to me that they have yet to even attempt the single most useful piece of magic in the entirety of the Harry Potter series and it is inherently wandless. Why has no one apparated yet? Is the reason a fear of splinching, because if it is that also makes no sense considering they are much more in tune with thier powers now than they ever were in thier previous lives. They found hogwarts and are in the same universe as thier previous lives so it should have the same laws of physics that made it possible then. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Validus…you have my respect for the get back. Good story . |
![]() ![]() ![]() Lil Allara! |