A beautiful little story, it was a very touching read and a believable romance. I do have some minor points I'd like to critique - mentioning in an aside in the second chamber that major parts of the previous book went completely different than canon leaves the reader a bit at sea with what is going on, it removes some of the foundation of the story. I think at this point you'd need to elaborate a bit to clear up how much was changed from canon.
Also I don't think we ever learned what happened to the real F&B after the scene in the ministry, don't think you mentioned either again so they might be dead or might have been captured or - a possibility with Ms B - might just have been on an appointment. Ultimately it's not important for the story and not the focus at this point, but it just seemed like something is missing.
Thank you for writing this story, I thoroughly enjoyed it.

What a beautiful story. Thank you for sharing your work. I will be back to read again to be certain.

Just wish at end when Fred said the beard was growing on him, that George replied saying that's how beards work

Its easy to find out which continuity the fanfic is following (books or movies) solely by the other two schools students since in the movies both are gender only schools while in the books they arent

This is a shit fanfiction

This was wonderful. Painful, but you did a great job capturing Harry's feelings, I feel you missed out a bit on the shame he would have felt at being seen like that by Fleur an everyone else. What he would have wanted is to be taken to the room and seen by as few as people as possible, but aside from that, pretty damn great. Fleur's pain was perfectly done.

Yt

this was a wonderful story.

This was an Awesome, Awesome story, one of the best I have read in a long time. This goes into my Favorites.
:))

Bravo.
To both you and your wife.
Thanks for sharing.
It's a story I never could have written, due to how you depicted Harry's background, but it was a story that really needed to be told. You more than did it justice.

I can't put much of my feelings into words but, thank you. This was one of the best stories I have ever read. It kept me hooked the entire time and warmed my heart multiple times. Thank you for bringing these characters to life and bringing me into their world. Thank you for a happy ending with realistic troubles and solutions. Thank you for this fantastic read.

I’m really not a fan of the ‘no time for quidditch’ trope that is extremely popular among writers… ignoring the sport completely would be a better option than saying a character doesn’t have time for something and then having them add nothing (or very little) to a standard school schedule… this consistently comes across as laziness in writing rather than well thought out plot.

Overall, this is a pretty good story, but this could have been handled much better… or for a real reason rather than a mere supposition.

Good to know that Harry is a canon walking push over. Great writing. Not

If you’re just going to literally have the tasks play out exactly as they did in canon, what was the point of writing this story in the first place? I might as well read the actual book by Rowling you twit

Damn this Harry is even weaker than the canon Harry loool