Common mistake re: travellings from Suburban Surrey to London; the Underground doesn't go that far. One must take the suburban (or "regional") railway. That would leave one at Kings' Cross, and from there one would then take the Underground.

Sad that you abandoned this. I saw that you have a 'new', improved version started. I shall look at it. It's only at ch. 19 now, though.
I o like inheritance rituals, and don't consider them trite or a cliché, after all, some things just must be done. What IS cliché, I think, is when he is the heir to a dozen fortunes. ;)
I have been enjoying this story, so I hope your improvements are good and that you will keep your mojo and continue on. :)

Biting my nails in sad anticipation worrying about Hedwig. Will she survive his momentary death?

"...she had many things about the Boy-Who-Lived..." - heard many things
"...Dumbledore gently one of the two names aloud..." - said?

"...having learnt them from Beauxbaton of the Delecour library." - or

Just a couple of oops. Unusual for this story.
"...Rita quickly hid behind one of the many shacks." - shrubs? bushes?
"...bowels of French dishes..." - bowls

oh come on really

I really don't understand why you keep having Harry compare himself to Voldemort? Why would Harry care about what the man who murdered his parents And have tried to kill him repeatedly, used to look like or how handsome he was or whatever? In their first encounter in second year he tried to manipulate Harry, in their second encounter they had a fight to the death which Harry won. Where in that do you see any kind of interaction that would result in Harry remotely wanting to compare himself to this man? the only thing Harry would think about when it comes to voldemort is how to kill him once and for all.

Electricity powers? Im interested

yeah i cant read this its the exact same as the books ill skip this chapter

you made all the work you wrote in look like nothing. Voldemort came back damn near exactly like cannon lol. The only difference is you just used someone elses blood when harry could have used them oh so special powers you wrote in to escape already! Truly a tragic telling about this event truly unimpressed here!

Автор ты конченный, если бы ты знал мир Поттерианы ты написал все как надо, но я не понимаю нахрен на лезть туда где ты не разбираешься. В турнире могу участвовать совершенно летние и если Гарри в нем участвует он автоматически становится взрослым и без надлежащей опеки над ним. Почему он не пошёл в банк к гоблинам а? Салазвр должен ему об этом сказать. И мы читаем теперь бред чистой воды где происходит суд. Молодец обосрались мы знатно.

После того если Поттер не порвёт с грифиндором, как все они против него встали. Говорю сразу Поттер тогда конченный дегенерат как и сам автор который это написал. И если так же он не пойдёт грингатс и не заберёт кольцо лорда поттера и слизарена возможно ещё чёрное кольцо, ведь его бабка чёрная. Ведь в турниры участвуют совершеннолетнии. А по логике он теперь эмпансированный.

Пошли ты к черту эту грязнокровка она не подходит в друзья, все что она может это совать свой нос и тыкать как надо, что ещё взять от магла.

Обычный фф про тупого поттера который вместе с грязнокровкой и рыжим мусором