I actually really enjoy how this is written, and i really look forward to future updates!

I like the story, good work. Jaune’s family say they were preventing him from becoming a hunter to protect him but really they were protecting themselves from the pain of him dying. It was an act of selfishness not selflessness, I don’t think that is love. Guess he’ll be able to emphasize with Pyrrha being treated as an object. It is ironic that the fear of losing him only guaranteed they would lose him.

Also draining his aura for years straight and making him feel hollow seems like a form of torture. Maybe one of them should try it, see if they even make it to a year. After tasting freedom I wouldn’t be surprised if he killed himself if he was brought back home.

Ahh, pre-character development Weiss. She is such a... Delight. (Yeah, let's go with that.)

From now on Weiss shall be known as Panty-Flash Princess until she learns to wear some spats under that combat skirt of hers. (Ruby will similarly be known as Panty-Flash Reaper in case a situation occurs where Jaune sees her underwear as well.)

Also who wants to take bets on when Weiss finds out Jaune kept her head from ending up like watermelon pumped full of too much air from a bike.

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This escape attempt has me thoroughly invested. I'm curious how this is gonna go and what else you have instore for us. The motes of light were particularly interesting cause if they were just figments of his imagination, they wouldn't illuminate anything at all. The explanation on how he was going to hold his breath for a long time was also very interesting, though it didn't seem like it was needed as much as it would've been if there was no grimm to carry him out. Either way I think this is an interesting concept that I'm excited to see more of. Keep up the good work.

Well then. A lot of action, I see. I like it. Wonder how the interactions between Jaune and Weiss will be from here on out. Will she find out what happened that night? And the expansion for Jaune's semblance open so many doors. For example, could he use his semblance to change the structure of his own body? Like, reinforce his muscles and organs? Food for thought, I guess.

So the jail break begins.

Jajajaja una joya es lo que este fic es, una gran historia. Espero con ansias el próximo capítulo muchas gracias.

time skip. new sister. flash backs. can't wait for the new chapters!

Gears and Gloria: the real MVPs

I have to say, I am loving this story so far, Jaune (or I guess John now? haha) doesn't seem too out of character, not being overtly hateful to his family even if they did keep him in a gilded cage, harvesting his aura, his dedication to his dreams, and using his strongest asset, his head. The characters are full, not simply one dimensional cut-outs, like his sister, even what little we see of her, we can see her being perhaps influenced by everybody around her to say that this is best for Jaune. Then added lore behind both aura and the way it affects huntsmen is so neat, I am always giddy when people add their own views and theories to such unexplained phenomenon. I don't think I can understate how closely I will be following this story, I am just that excited! I look forward to the next chapter with much enthusiasm!

MORE, I NEED MOOOOOOOORE

Amazing. Keep up the work.

The idea for his escape was creative and imaginative. And the escape was overall well written. It's nice to see that you wrote aura training as a hard thing to master, I've read way too many power-fantasy Jaune fics where he becomes an aura expert in a few hours.

And I like how you expanded on the theory of aura, how Jaune uses it to strengthen his internal body instead of training his physical strength.

I look forward to reading more.

The arguments are realistic, the conflict is believable, and I can kinda see where Jaune's family is coming from. Even if they're way overblown, essentially asphyxiating Jaune with how overprotective they are.

I look forward to reading more.

Awesome story! I’m hooked!