bro kill the fucktard omg his is disgusting that he would even thing about apologizing

Loved it. had some issues, mainly with a few small moments that seemed ooc to me as you tried to heavy handedly build up to what I can see you building up to (gotta have percabeth have maximum awkwardness but also maximum chemistry I get it, but damn, he’s a fucking kid and she’s not as much as they have other factors working in their favor. I honestly think the whole “me” while looking her in the eye talking about trust, and annabeth even giving the time of DAY level of legitimacy and patience to someone who has kids with her and a marriage of 10 years but is afraid of her getting stolen by a 17-18 year old is not rly something they would/should do. Laying it on a little thick here to sow the seeds of the drama lol haha. Also think Percy would never be sith-lord style threatening murder over some words like that , he’s too good of a guy at the core of the character.

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BUT BUT BUT

There’s a lot more here that you’re doing right and that I love. The emotional conflict and tension is definitely very tasty and honestly super realistic for a situation that is as depressing and sad as it highkey is on both sides. Your prose and imagery are excellent as always (although I’d say a bit lacking expounding on how Aannabeth has changed as a 35 year old, I’ve kinda had to fill in the gaps with how she looks and sounds in my mental picture because there’s no way she would be the same and be worth just calling “Annabeth” on first mention in Percy’s thoughts considering the guy examined how new Rome looked even though he’s seen that before too.

I’m spending way too much time here talking about the critical nit picks though. As you may recall this is what I hoped to you would be an excellent direction to go with the story so I’m loving every bit of it and can’t wait for more. Absolutely stunning work overall filling out the details from scenery, background characters, the vibe of Percy’s growing power / fading connection to mortality, world building, love it love it love. Can’t wait for the drama to come

Where is the next chapter as I'm addicted to this story

man this chapter things, but I’m excited to see how you’ll write percy’s new love interest. it’s gonna be difficult to top percabeth, but I think you’ll be able to pull it off

This is the first PJ fanfiction I've read that goes so deep into the characters' emotions. I can feel everything so strongly. Some tears just couldn't be held back

Oh myyy .. I love your summer holiday.. I get 3 chapters in 1 month!

I am waiting the time when Percy found love in his moon .. how can they happen

Always great when you update. Liking that you're bringing the Romans in a bit now. I always look forward to when I can sit down and read your stuff.

Really enjoyed the dialouge here. Im hoping for the story to explore a bit of the roman area and still keep a good pacing. Hopefully some updates soon! Great chapter as always.

Annabeth really doesn’t know what to do… on the one hand, Percy who she still has feelings for(based off the end bit). On the other hand, she literally told her husband to trust that she loves him and left him like that. Of course, it could also just be nothing

This chapter feels like one of your best yet and super short because of how immediately I was drawn in and wanting for more. Also I love the Annabeth scenes and actually addressing the relationship they had and where life has brought them to, it really makes the story feel far more realistic than almost every other fic thats not percabeth and finds some way to demonize or kill her off. Your story choices are great so far and did I pick up on that hint from Annabeth that Percy might be something more than a demigod, it’s not the first line that alludes to it, Enlil’s statue saw something special in Percy as well, and I’m eager to see that plot point be worked out long term. One question I would like answered is how long/ many chapters do you anticipate writing for this, because I need to get a good estimate for how much more of this high is left before being disappointed with just about every other story out there

Reading percabeth in this circumstances hurts so much

and percy would never say 'slay queen' lmao

bro you've made percy way too simpy, this is cringe

Great chapter

In ancient times I believe the former commander, still commanded respect as a veteran/advisor. Also, given the method in which he spent the 20 years, he could still be on the roster as praetor? Perhaps he should claim the position of legate, to restore order to the legion