Reviews for Dear Wizarding Britain |
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![]() ![]() ![]() more to come? Time to come back and finish the story |
![]() ![]() Draco's punishment was a complete overreaction and unnecessary - yes he attempted to do a horrific thing but what Harry did to him was even worse. This really tainted the rest of the story for me, although Harry did go back and make sure that Draco was rescued, that was too little, too late. Also Harry's relationship with Daphne seems forced and awkward - as for Daphne getting pregnant so early into the relationship, it's unrealistic that after one night apart the relationship is suddenly fine. Your initial idea that Harry would have left seems far more likely. Your use of AI was clumsy and unnecessary, this is a slippery slope as it's unfair to anyone who chooses to write without a computer program doing all the work. If you've lost the inspiration to write just don't write, all you're doing is contributing to the destruction of creativity that AI causes. |
![]() ![]() ![]() If you’re regretting a decision you made and thing your punishment for the character was too harsh then you should’ve rewrote things so you were happier with the outcome. Instead you came up with a ridiculous scenario to rectify your flaws. |
![]() ![]() I absolutely hate the lily in dreams angle. She wasnt there to haunt her even for a bit of emotional support when shit happened to him. When he does doing, she haunts her? Thats bullshit |
![]() ![]() ![]() That was a bit over the top...Just kill him painfully |
![]() ![]() YES! Finally, Draco has received the punishment he-or should I say she, deserved. Of course, Daphne Greengrass, Tracey Davis, Millicent Bulstrode and Blaise Zabini won't care. Snape might, but they won't. |
![]() ![]() I almost pity Draco Lucius Malfoy, but ONLY almost. Even if Dobby DID manage to stop Draco, attempted rape is STILL attempted rape, and a crime at that. I doubt if Harry will stand for that. I know I wouldn't. |
![]() ![]() Remus, Tonks, the Twins, Neville, Luna and Fleur are apparently on Harry's side. So is Arthur Weasley, it seems, but I am quite certain Dumbledore, Molly, Ginny and Ron are not. |
![]() ![]() Good move, Harry! Ron is now, and always has been, like his mum, a first-class, 5-star traitor. In fact, I'd even go so far as to call him Peter Pettigrew the 2nd. After all, Peter was a Gryffindor opportunist who betrayed Harry's parents, and Ron was a Gryffindor opportunist who betrayed Harry Potter. |
![]() ![]() I liked this story, until "We need to rally the people, expose the death eaters for what they truly are, and build a resistance against the current regime." "Expose the death eaters for what they truly are"? Really? Harry and Daphne just read an article that detailed what the death eaters in training were really like AND previously Hermione brought up doing the SAME thing and Harry said that it basically wasn't his problem because the sheep needed to wake up and defend themselves. So after reading an article saying pretty much the same thing Hermione said earlier and was shot down for, NOW all of a sudden it's a big deal and NOW they "need to do something about it?" You should have kept going in the direction you were where Voldemort would track Harry down, kidnap James or Daphne (probably via Death Eater), make Harry disembody Voldemort and then go back and rescue whoever was kidnapped and then hunt down the Horcruxes. Probably the best way to do this would be to have James or Daphne kidnapped by the "Light Side" so that he is forced to hunt the horcruxes down. So, Death Eaters kidnap one leading to a fight between Harry and Voldemort and the Light Side takes the other to force Harry to complete the prophecy, not whatever the hell is happening here. I tried to keep going, but the story was good until this point but now, well... |
![]() ![]() ![]() Please update. |
![]() ![]() ![]() was that the real Lily Potter or just his conscience TAKING HER FORM |
![]() ![]() cattle branded by the mongrel riddley poof pants lol |
![]() ![]() So Harry is now a metamorphmagus like Tonks! I suppose Dumbledore must have found out, and bound his powers, since his metamorph ability could have interfered with Dumbledore's plans for Harry. Harry is NOT going to forgive the Death Eaters. |
![]() ![]() This particular fanfiction, "Dear Wizarding Britain" by author Harry Potter FanGirl85 is definitely one of the better ones, and COULD become a Harry Potter Classic. Here is my rating system. BBad. NMBNot Much Better. PPathetic. DDrivel. WWorse. "My Immortal" is rated D. GBGetting Better. FFair. MBMuch Better. GRGreat. RBRon Bashing. DBDefinitely Better. CClassic. IACOIOIn A Class Of Its Own. "Harry Potter and the Unexpected Friend" I rate as GR, "Harry Potter and the Unexpected Dogfather" is rated DB, while "Finding A Place to Call Home" with Astoria Greengrass, is unhesitatingly graded IACOIOIn A Class Of Its Own. "Dear Wizarding Britain" I rate as MBMuch Better. |