I loved this story. Very interesting, except you on your toes, and it was very well thought out. I’m huge fan :)

I recently found this gorgeous story and I’m thoroughly enjoying it. However, I’m running across some minor inconsistencies in some paragraphs. There are either words missing or misspelled/misused. For example, the word “quite” is being used in conjunction with “quiet”, when the setting requires a kind of silence or muted suspense.

One other minor infraction is when you go from one POV to another right after without having some break lines to separate them. It can cause the reader to get confused on what POV is being focused on at the moment.

I’m not giving this story negative criticism, just a bit of critique is all. There’s always room for improvement and it’s up to you, if you wish to come back to the story and fix it. Otherwise, your story is truly incredible and keep up the good work and it’ll help you improve.

A thrill to read and hard to put down! Congrats on such a cool piece and making it your own interpretation. An interesting concept of combining the past/present for sure! *applause*

Just found this 16 year old gem. I’ve always been fond of Kenshin vampire stories and modern A/Us. This one seems to be off to a very good start.

Belated thanks for writing.

Great read better ending then the movie.

I love this story,I would like to read lemon too.

Wow, in around the early 2000's you werent alowed to post porn? Huh..

Awesome fic!

So flipping cute! I want to build a fort now

The last part of the fight scene was kind of confusing. I know the end result of the fight but the order that the last several events happened in wasn't very clear. Do you think you could one day go back over it and try to make it clearer?

I like this story, but can you fix the italics that started when Kaoru got back to the apartment with Kenshin carrying her?

This is a promising start to what looks to be an intriguing read. I enjoyed this chapter and others of your stories, so thank you for taking the time to write them. I don't mean to be rude, but I have consistently noticed spelling errors in several of your stories, and I understand if you have reasons for leaving them or just don't have the benefit of spelling as a skill. I just wanted to point that out in case no one else had, again, I don't mean to be rude, and am enjoying this story so far.

Ohh, a lovely start! I can't wait to read the rest of this! :D

WOW!

i'm upset this story is finished