Be real interested in seeing what a Kara character model would look like in Street fighter 6

we need a fight with juri and Chun li

Peeling an onion with an onion? Never heard that before

also I wonder what kinda growth you have for these 2 especially juri.

will this continue into street fighter 6?best juri design) I feel with the nature of the story mode with you creating a character and stuff that it would work the best

I wonder if kara will eventually get abilities of her own similar to juri, maybe instead of an purple eye it's an green arm or something

you gonna continue this or not

Great work keep it up

These three chapters were pretty good! Hardly anything is too simple and for that reason there’s plenty of interest to keep a reader engaged. Why is Balrog selling merchandise to the Illuminati, and why Juri’s eye specifically? What are Vega’s priorities, or why did he team up with Balrog against Juri after just denouncing his colleague? Just what is Aiden capable of? These are good questions to keep in a reader’s mind, and I think you’ve done a good job with them as hooks.

The little moments of character are much appreciated- I feel like Kara is a good, established character already, and her courage is admirable because of her fear and anxiety. Juri, meanwhile, is snide and unpleasant to those she’s not familiar with, and pretty snarky to boot. Her snarkiness even in pain is a delight to read. I think you’ve done well with her character, and I look forward to how she interacts, and possibly warms up, towards Kara.

On a nit-picky note, I can’t help but feel that you over-describe things or elaborate too much instead of either giving the bare necessities or allowing the reader to make their own conclusions/observations. The fight in Chapter 2 seemed just a little too convoluted- I’m guilty of this starting out myself, so don’t worry too much about it and see it as a stepping stone). The environment descriptors in Chapter 4, while intricate, seem more at home in some schematics. And then the POV from Kara near the end of that chapter when there are about two paragraphs recounting the scuffle outside the hotel seemed unnecessary, but I’m not familiar with different POVs in stories. Like I said, I’m just nitpicking here.

Keep up the good work.

It is so, so nice to see a fic like this - a little glimmer of hope in the sad desert of SF fanfic. A fic that is building its plot for the long haul, setting up the stage, and clearly working towards creating a polished, professional product. It's such a shame the community is so quiet nowadays overall, leads to less readers and less writers, so less feedback...and the people like you trying to really make something good don't get reviews.

I am curious about your decision to focus on an OC, it's an interesting setup. Also curious about how this person will tie in with Juri. I enjoyed your setup of Metro City and establishing Cody in the background.
Your dedication to utilizing in-game movement for fight scenes is impressive and makes for very detailed reading. Let me know if you're open to concrit, but if not no worries, it's clear you're very thorough in your research and committed to accuracy.

I hope more people will read this and give you comments - I know not getting feedback or reviews after so much work and dedication can be discouraging. Thanks for a refreshing read.

Very good. It’s good to see more Juri fics, and I like that you touch on Viper, Cammy and especially Cody. We will watch your career with great interest.”