he felt lockhart got what he deserved, the only thing that irked quinn was that he was the one to deliver it.

what is it stark says: those who pass the sentence should swing the sword.

you are a damned hypocryt if you cannot stick to this

this whole mystical seven deathly sins magic is more then a little odd and tbh just drama for the drama

stealing his money is worse then his memories? that is some bullshit

why not take the whole basilisk

villians monologue is bad that is why quinn does it as well right after saying it.

this story had quite some potential but it def didnt work out

come to think of it these vaults of yours are a hell of a lot more dangerous then a basilisk. why the fuck would they be in a school? because you need something to write about when he is not there for school and is ignoring voldy?

what hands out candy and asks for favors?

the kind of person your parents tell you to run from...

what a drama about the dairy. he needs to stop whining and just take action, you know like setting up some wards and traps near mertle

are you seriously wasting words on a lockhart fanclubwhy isnt he reading the books and making a bundle of notes that calls out on all his bullshit?
he even goes to his classes...

prevention is better then the cure

that is funny considering he wont take the horcrux away because he cannot destroy it yet...

few things are worse then making a canon rehash, no matter how much you deviate from the magic system if the plot remains the same... why bother?

magical fax, very original, hope you'll work of of it with your type writer. its doubtfull it'll ever become a computer but a simple way to type adjust print and send is a big improvement

the things about taking notes is that you remember it better that way. if you can legitimitly sell notes as extra information then the course books are clearly lackig

everyone signing for something they buy is really really stupid, they could easily be signing a magical contract hidden by a glamour. the goblet of fire showed how dangerous a written name can be

pretty sure it wasnt the fault of the cold vault he nearly died. what kind of moron walks into such a thing when being warned of death without warming charms without any prep for that matter

there is dissapointingly little flair, take this whole yule ball, nothing is happening no witty banter it just is. where is the gossip about dumbledore and his corridor of death or the 'rumors' of the troll. hell you could even have put in a bit about fudge and how malfoy was bragging with his name to denigrade halfbloods 'such an uncultered swine, how far they have fallen'

you know something more instead of just introductions and saying how besutifull sophie is. even the encounter with malfoy snr was only won because of his grandfather, basicly he pulled a draco

the advice you are given lily is ridiculous. snape is one of those ppl that loves to play up the victim role. everything that goes wrong is the fault of others but def not of snape, for all his brilliance he is just a whining petulent brat.

lily becoming friends with him would have to be totally from lily's side as snape is just plain unpleasant to be around

so he does his best to hide his abilities and ignores commen sense to keep the plot intact but when the trolls show up he suddenly throws caution out of the window?