jordino's pokemon fics is the best when it comes to si or seni si fics. natural is second.

I am so fucking frustrated this is the 5th fic i read that the mc just let's others talk shit and move on. when that kid pushed past him he should have kicked his knee out and then stomped his head. if you can't talk shit properly and make pompous asses eat their words atleast learn to knock the shit out of them.

Too many characters seem to pop up with exotic Pokemon. Most average Joes and Janes in Kanto should have Kantonian Pokemon, and most likely not rare ones. Having Johtoian Pokemon would be the mark of a strong trainer who travelled far indeed. Elite level trainers might have Pokemon from Sinnoh, Alola or Hoenn. But Pokemon from places like Galar, Kalos or Paldea should not be on anyone's roster who isn't extremely elite and/or famous.

Great fic so far

hope the new story will be just as good as this one, i loved this

Alright, first, your NAMING SENSE SUCKS SO MU-CH!
who the hell calls their pokemon deku from bnha, ugh, ridiculous.

second, really? Gary A TEN FUCKING YEAR BOY IS DRIVING A CAR WITH GIRLS?! man, do a bit more realistic this isnt the fucking anime, try to make some sense will ya

third, what happened to the money they are suppose to be betting against trainer? they dont bet anything?!

fourth, nina is fucking annoying, that per se isnt that bad, but the MC reaction is, i hate pussy mc who just accept being dragged around, from the way she acts with him and push his boundaries its clear he never set them, always let her drag around and disrespect him, a bit annoying, atlreast u had the guts to make them go their separated ways since he wants to take it easy, would be interesting if she fails because she is clearly a immature trainer since the way she treater her chamander in the first epi, he would totally not respect her at all, hopefully it can do smth to make she realize that she need to respect her pokemon more. anyway, hopefully the mc gets a bit more backbone in their interactions

me encanta la historia honestamente y me gustó cómo fueron sus inicios y como se incluyo los capítulos del anime como al mismo tiempo el MC no interfiere con la historia completamente al ir con ash al ir en su viaje y cambiar totalmente el curso de la historia original solo pequeño detalles aquí y allá con sus Pokémon siendo totalmente sincero los iniciales no lo cambiaría porque como se unió con deku spiritu Thalia Loki y DEFINITIVAMENTE dejaría al pequeño togepi a la alternativa y el nacimiento de su su dicho es muy conmovedor pero también fue decepcionante como no tomo la oportunidad de tener Kabuto VIVO cuando tuvo la oportunidad si sabe que el futuro podrán ser revividos pero está a años de eso y también destruyó la entrada a cueva y tengo mis dudas sobre Mr Man ya que trato de MATARLO y eso no es algo que se puede pasar solo porque es un niño y cree que todos los Pokémon pueden cambiar Doris es una excepción pero solo porque la tuvo desde un magicarp y lo de Sabrina no digo que fuera mala solo definitivamente puede y debió ser diferente a como se presentó inicialmente pero aparte de eso espero y la futura reescritura conserve los Pokémon que recolectó con solo ligeros cambios para que encaje con la nueva pero si soy honesto tengo favoritos por deku como número 1 a spiritu como número 2 y togepi como número 3 pero solo porque no se unió a las luchas porque aún era muy joven pero y si se queden en la futura nueva historia

Species name is vastly superior to nickname. We come back to this fic a few months later in between updates no one will remember that crystal was actually your clefable or some so and such. And then using anime names for the nicknames is fairly cringe inducing

Honestly? The guy has memories from another life and he is still this weak? Even worse, he'll probably
still lose to people like Gary

Honestly I thought the story including the SI element was good along with the world building frankly the only two maybe two and a half grips I have are first the shadow pokemon bring something like that in you sort of need to give it some decent focus at least that how I feel anyway otherwise it feels a it tacked on but not truly part of the story.

Second is the Mr. Mime I've already commented on it in another review so I won't go into it more.

Finally the half grip Sabrina I honestly like most of what you did with her it was only her view of things that was a bit irritating but given we only have a single interaction with her there just wasn't enough to say more for her or where she could have gone in the story.

Great Story, I absolutely loved the way it was told and how it captured the energy of the Pokémon Anime. I hope the rewrite is just as good, thanks for the journey and best of luck.

Well, this is a bit disappointing. There weren’t any major flaws in your story, only minor typos. I only had one big complaint and that was the Mr. Mime.

I’m cool with the fake tree Pokémon joining, but not the Mr. Mime. It’s tried to kill him three times. How many times is too many?

The criticism over the second "self-insert" was weak in the first place. It was true to a certain extent, but it was just a speed bump as far as novel flaws go.

I think it would have been a much smarter idea to just rewrite the chapter in question and edit sabrina self-insert out. Replace with normal Sabrina encounter, problem solved. Maybe we will just skip that chapter, but it's far more dangerous to start over again.

I'm actually a little sad because I honestly loved every single thing about this story, your decisions and the way the story was going was something I hadn't seen in a long time and I enjoyed it immensely. I'm sorry that some people were incredibly negative and rude to you. FF as a site I find breeds a lot of negativity and rudeness. I'm sad to see it discontinued and while I'll try to read the rewrite...idk. I think I might've enjoyed this one too much to want to see it go through that. Regardless though, I deeply enjoyed this and hope you keep writing both what and how you want.