Where's the rest of the story

Interesting beginning

Hi,
Thank you for sharing this opening chapter with us. I am intrigued by your start and summary. So Eisabeth is not the daughter of Mrs Bennet but share their surname. Jane is not the serene and calm sister we know from canon but maybe more of a Miss Bingley with vapid attentions and social climbing ambitions? Hopefully you will share more of YOUR story or vision with us!

Please continue YOUR story, don’t let anyone bother you. There are lots of variations that read somehow similar, it’s going to happen as the theme of the story is always the same, how you diverge from the original story is what makes it yours and different. I like what you wrote so far. You can do it.

This seems to have the same background to the story Bounded Hearts, I hope you diverge from that if you continue with this story

An interesting start, there’s obviously a different family dynamic, Mrs Bennet did not introduce Lizzy with her other daughters, I wonder why ?Jane is different - a not so nice person, I like that.

All proper nouns should start with a capital letter for example Mrs Bennet, Jane, Mary, Kitty, Lydia, Charlotte and Lizzy.
Some punctuation mistakes and in one paragraph you used “their” instead of “there”.

This advice is only meant to encourage you and not to disparage you.
Please keep on writing, you have made a good start :-)

Looks interesting

Are you continuing with this story as it has the potential to be great. I’ve loved the beginning and really want more.

Great start, looking forward to reading what happens next

I know it's been only five days, but I felt like I'd give you some words to encourage you to write/update.
I'd love to read more of what you've in store for Darcy/Elizabeth.

Please update, I like it.

Please update soon! I'm curious how this enfolds

Interesting. Would love to read more.

Great start, I'm very curious about Elizabeth's position in the family

Fun chapter!