You know, for a moment, a little moment, I felt like I was reading one of KKat's works and it was nostalgic. I really liked this chapter.
by the way, if you don't know who kkat is, he's the author of Fallout Equestria.

Uh.. the plot thickens.

I'm kind of agree with Dalandor's decision to leave. The ponies were rather rude (even Twilight) and not even one of them apologized after the incident, even the gryphon was more respectful. Besides it will give even more potential to the story, Yay! just like that creepy slogan says "I'm loving it" haha

A don't care it advances a little slow, your descriptions makes the story easy to picture... like watching a movie

Wow, really a great story. Please do more