Interesting

Damn, they really boutta rock the ironborn shit lmao

tftc

I honestly cannot continue. In development of abilities, daily decisions, the way the way the story has progressed, how do you compare an infant to a teenager? Or is the twin sister also secretly a SI?

6k word chapter is great thanks author. Even if the chapter was mostly others point of views and not Jon’s or Visenyas I still liked it

Honestly, you would probably make quite a bit more money if you didn't charge $25 for that seven-chapter early access. If you made it, let's say $5-$7, it's a far easier pill to swallow for most people and would be something people are more likely to pay for.

I didn't even notice the fact that you had Jon beat Jaime; honestly, that's just bad writing for Jon to beat the single greatest swordsman in the entire kingdom. It would make far more sense for him to come to a draw at best, especially because Jon simply lacks the instructors that could elevate him to that level.

Honestly, I can't tell if you are trying to make Jon seem clever but he really isn't. That scene with Howland was just terrible in the end. Another problem I have with this story is that it really doesn't make any sense that Ned hasn't told him the truth yet or why Jon hasn't just come out with knowing. You just keep dancing around this truth that needs to happen for any real preparation to one day take back his throne with real backing unless he plans to simply burn the kingdoms into submission.

been looking forward to this

Another filler chapter. I understand you're milking this to get money from idiots on Patreon but you could have waited to have Jon plan to sell nightfall until after the iron born are decimated. Especially with how Tywinn thinks that he can grab other swords during the slaughter and then he no longer needs to pay Jon for nightfall.

thanks :)

tftc

I like some of your stories but this one is horrible. An extreme amount of Stark bashing that doesn’t make any sense and extreme amount of unbelievable Targaryen simping.

Exactly what we need, another Bashing shit SI Mary Sue, written by a rhaeger obsessed mentally challenged cunt of a Fanboy

I feel Jon wasted too much time playing with Lorch. I man with the magic you have him show he could just start stabbing with with ice vlad s one after another. Because with the torture you describe Lorch got plenty of wounds that don't fit with stalactites falling on him. Unless one was supposed to destroy his jaw and most of his head.