Reviews for In an Ocean of Stars
Solski chapter 1 . 10/20/2021
A non-cliché pertemis story? very promising so far too
Azure Mane chapter 2 . 10/20/2021
It's absolute bs dude. Hestia'd never agree to something like this. And I expected a more aggressive response from percy. Overall, this story isn't good at all.
Yoshi1911 chapter 3 . 10/19/2021
Alright let me first say I enjoy the concept and look forward to more. We have a pertemis discord server if you want to join. I also offer my help. I have degrees in Greek history and mythology. One big thing is Rick messed up Artemis in a massive way. She isn’t the biggest man hater. She doesn’t even hate all men. She also isn’t opposed to marriage or even prevented her oath was her father would never force her in return she would be a maiden. She actually had festivals where boys and girls would meet to potentially be married. So please don’t make her too hatred oriented or opposed to love. Please message if ya ever need anything look forward to more!
NexJaeger chapter 3 . 10/19/2021
I just stumbled upon this story and it sure is a fresh idea. Keep up the good work!
Mark Andrew chapter 3 . 10/19/2021
Question.. wouldn't some of the Hunt least be civil with Percy? I mean.. before she died Zoe did declare Percy as a friend wouldn't that have had some impact on the Hunters?
I could see the youngest members being slightly afraid yes, but also seeing him as a big brother figure. Or if he rescues some himself a father like one.
Though you say Arty (don't tell her that was said!) will be frosty.. I feel she would be grudgingly kind too. He did prove on Olympus he doesn't want this as much as her. Plus the oath he made I think would leadt have some impact, besides the fact she considers him a man, not a boy.
Heh.. Thals will be surprised
Sorry my musing! Cannot wait for the next chapter!
SethBooker408 chapter 3 . 10/19/2021
I wish you had Percy be mad at every god/goddess even Poseidon(no war, none of it would happen) for forcing him into the marriage. It would’ve been cool to see how some of the gods would have tried to get him to forgive them if they cared. Especially Hestia, since she betrayed him by basically taking advantage of his fatal flaw of loyalty to his family/friends when she was talking to him.
Guest chapter 3 . 10/18/2021
This story has a lot of potention as long as it will not be a cliche guardian of the hunt story. Keep going :)
HellRaiderS chapter 3 . 10/18/2021
Loved it perfect story keep the updates coming
EgoRaptor chapter 3 . 10/18/2021
Honestly, any story that basically starts off with 21k words is already setting the bar high up, and I can tell this is gonna be a masterpiece, looking forward to reading the next 300k words!
Otagema chapter 3 . 10/18/2021
As the writer of "Time and Time Again", I'm looking forward to how this story turns out, especially as it's a Pertemis one. A question though, will you be making a story with a Percy/Zoe pairing in the future?
TheKingOfPrussia chapter 1 . 10/18/2021
Enjoyed the story so farHope you continue to write, I think this will be a great story!
Lady hemera chapter 3 . 10/18/2021
Loving the storyline so far! Your idea is quite refreshing in its originality. Just a tip/critique: you write the demigods(especially Percy in his conversation with Chiron and Nico in his parting words to Percy) with very formal and older English speaking patterns. Just remember that the demigods are young! They use slang and phrases and have inside jokes with each other and don’t even properly use all the rules of the English language and grammar. They definitely aren’t gonna speak like actors in a Shakespeare play.

If you need a bit of help, maybe try rereading canon dialogue to get a feel for how each character interacts with others. And since this story features Percy heavily interacting with gods, definitely go over how he interacts with them.
For example, in his first meeting with Artemis, Artemis introduces herself as a goddess and Percy responds with “Um…okay.”

While Percy definitely avoids getting incinerated by the gods, he isn’t always the most respectful or reverent of them. Anyway, thanks for writing and sharing
Guest chapter 3 . 10/18/2021
I dont know why you restrict yourself with trying to not write too much, you should write however much you want, otherwise it'll probably feel forced or rushed at some point if you try to do that.
Also the conversation at the end with Nico where he tells him everything feels a little clunky, he seems a little too emotional and eager to repeat everything as if he tries to narrate for us readers which kinda annoys me because he's just recycling old news.
Otherwise good-ish chapter
Guest chapter 2 . 10/18/2021
I still don't get why it had to be Artemis specifically. That was just a petty thing from Hera and I don't understand how she got that through that it had to be Artemis.
I mean... Zeus would vote against it, Poseidon anyways. Athena and Apollo. Obv. Artemis and I don't like how you portrayed Aphrodite last chapter, how I see it she would've probably, maybe voted against it too.
She said she wanted to give Percy an interesting love life and a marriage would ruin that plan, especially one to Artemis and while she didn't really like the hunters like shown in the titans curse i think you're exaggerating that part a lot.
Robert Moucka chapter 3 . 10/18/2021
awesome i love it !
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