Reviews for Turn Into Something
Akamoroti chapter 1 . 3/14/2022
This was a cool story. I thought it was interesting how they carried such a relatively short conversation out over weeks. Neither seemed to be one of many words so it fit. And of course, the day they both decided they were ready to talk to the other more, Harry is gone. But at least they both appeared to leave an impact on the other. But sure would be nice to have them meet in the future. . . Nice job, thanks for sharing.
LynxRaven chapter 1 . 2/28/2022
Nicely done, I like this story a lot, and the light touch you used on something that easily could have become melodramatic, I enjoyed it greatly.
Taliesin19 chapter 1 . 11/8/2021
I thought this was a really beautiful one shot. It perfectly depicts the two types of people in life without ever being blunt about it: those who allow their situations to control them, and those who control their situations. Harry is resilient and we've always known that, some people see it as an unrealistic character flaw. But I don't think it is. It's just a different way of responding to life's problems. I love when Kathryn was shocked by the passion in his voice, and she noted that difference in them. No one could blame Kathryn for responding to her life the way she does, bitter, hopeless, angry. In just a few paragraphs you painted a picture of her life story that didn't shy away from being ugly and painful and blisteringly realistic. But in a beautiful way, she comes to the most important realization in life: we always have some control. Over our emotions, our reactions, our outlook.

You did an amazing job with something so short, well done seriously
Saliient91 chapter 1 . 11/7/2021
Is this a first fic? It is for this FFN profile and I feel it’s quite good for such a thing! When I first started writing I learned a ton and slowly incorporated it into my writing.

At the end of the day, fanfic is about enjoyment and I did enjoy reading this! Does feel like it’s got room for a follow up too.

Great work and thanks for contributing to OCtober!
Nauze chapter 1 . 11/6/2021
Such an interesting story! I liked made us feel the passage of time, as well as the budding relationship between them. It had just a slow burn feel to it, despite the conciseness of the whole story, you managed to cram in so many details, that we truly felt the build up.

I'm surprised you didn't give it the expected climax but pleasantly so. It also makes me want to keep on reading and learn if they ever do get together.

I guess that's the goal every oneshot should have. To make people want to keep on reading, to leave them with that 'i want more' aftertaste, and you managed that perfectly.

Grammar-wise, this was fairly clean and it's a joy to read clean stories for me, as I get a lot of... well, poorly ones my way, hahaha. Well done!

While this was very narrative focus and not so much dialogue, whenever you did have dialogue, you showed a good hand at show/don't tell.

One suggestion I would give is to reduce a bit the blockiness of certain paragraphs and separating certain sentences into one-liners, so you'd have a bigger impact with them. Like the last sentence, for example. "She only...". Drop that as a single liner and you'd have a much bigger, resounding impact overall.

Not to say it isn't good as it is, but it's like putting up the sentence on a pedestal for show, drawing the reader's attention to it, subconsciously and making them go: "Oh, this is something important to pay attention to, I'll hang a lantern on it".

Overall, I enjoyed it immensely and I loved the somber, slower tone you picked and you most definitely achieved the 'i want more' status that I so love about one-shots.

Well done, bud )