author with mental disorder

10 out of 10 would shag again lol

Very very fun read! Well done bringing this to completion ;)

harry potter the murderhobo

I really, really enjoyed this mini-story's conclusion. At first, I thought the whole "other world" thing would just be a waste, but I genuinely enjoyed the relationship between Daphne and Harry (don't like the name Henry though).

The sex was kinky in a hot way but there was admittedly way too much of it especially when Harry turns 13. And I'm not critiquing you just because of his age. It was literally the volume taking up your chapters.

But I don't let something like this stop me from enjoying a fanfiction with great concepts and (otherwise) flow like yours. I think it's difficult to accomplish this with a story of your size. It's impressive and I was thoroughly entertained. Thank you for writing. I honestly only read completed fanfictions. I'll favorite you and check on your other one in a few months.

P.S. I have never seen an overpowered gamer written so well. Maybe because most people don't think that their gamer is overpowered in the first place and you set out to make him overpowered on purpose. Lol. Hat's off to you.

I know this is already finished, and it would be such a minor change to go back for (and might even be addressed in a future AN already), but since Harry is stuck as Fighter class right now and flight is a Mage class skill, then wouldn't Iris have had to fly them both down the pipe instead of Harry handling the flight? This would also mean that Harry's statement about them both being able to fly would be incorrect at the moment.

Also not sure if this ever gets addressed, but since Party skills come from Harry's skill list which is limited to 20 per class, what would happen i Harry ditched a skill that was assigned as a party skill?

What? I am confused about the ending of chapter

Like the buildup for Daphne a lot. Her 'Charmspeech' or whatever seems like the Cursed Speech from Jujutsu Kaisen from what I can tell.

The only real issues at this point are the lack of screen time for other characters. It's a shame that slutty Fem!Voldy gets more screen time than important characters like Tracey, Neville, Alice, Hermione, Weasleys, Dumbledore, etc.

I also personally think your entire 'System' needs to be revamped too...but it is MUCH too late for that. Maybe one of your newer stories will have a better structured System. The current one leaves MUCH to be desired.

Yet another bonus scene showing how much of a slut Fem!Voldy is... Is there even a point to all of this? How could knowing how much of a slut she is possibly help progress your story? What exactly is the point of such character development?

That entire situation was extremely forced. You basically just concocted a ridiculous quest to make Harry understand that 'Lily is a capable fighter' and to show Lily how dangerous quests can be.

Taking away the System (which was granted by The Creator himself) was also completely contradictory to the so called 'Creator's' original goals. What is the point of giving his so called 'Future Equal' a power that can be taken away at a whim? If he can just take the system away so easily, then it isn't ACTUALLY making Harry strong at all. It is basically just a crutch that can be ripped away at any time and a completely untrustworthy power.

The Fem!Voldemort (Eos or whatever) POV's are kind of annoying. Is she one of the main characters? Will she be part of the MC's harem or something? If so, then you should probably stop writing about how much of a slut she apparently is.

If she's NOT going to be part of the harem, then why even give her so much screen time? Why give so much character development to someone that is destined to die?

OMG! The Creator has 'fucked other female Harry Potters'...in other words, he has probably fucked Isis and then did something to make her hate him, hence her 'rebelling' against him!

Well...I thought the Fem!Voldemort was going to be one of the love interests for the MC but apparently you just wanted to give Voldemort a horcrux lover... Honestly, I'm really disappointed for some reason.

Wish you would have put what Lily picked for her shared Perks and Skills...