Reviews for In The Core
Avery-writes-stuff chapter 22 . 17h
Hi again! I read a lot last night but was too tired to keep on reviewing, but here's a big long review of everything now that I'm caught up! I loved all of the intros so much, and it was so so amazing to see you write Layla, she was better than I ever could have imagined and it was so cool to see her come to life like that. The pre-games had me so hooked from start to finish, I was NOT ready for Aiden and Jesse to die like that just for not signing the waivers. And I just LOVED all of them meeting each other and all the friendships and rivalries that they made. "It sounds like you're the one that needs to be careful then, she doesn't seem to like you very much" omg Layla I love her for saying that so much but also I'm so scared for her now that she's made the evilest person in her angry at her. Her scene with Aviv was sooo sweet though, can they just become best friends? And not have to do the whole killing thing?

It's so weird, I'm suuuper excited for next chapter but also suuuper terrified. I really, really, REALLY hope that the breakout plan the protesters are doing will work. At least save Layla, Aviv, Alaina, Kasper, London, Jules, Vito, Jared, and Lev. Is that too many to ask for?

(also, PS: there are SO many names with v in them? Aviv, Vito, Lev, Vi, Val, V... it makes my head spin a little bit)

The best of the best: Layla, Aviv
The best: Alaina, Kasper
I love them: London, Jules, Vito, Jared, Lev
I like them: Nora, Savannah, Rory, Dewei
I don't NOT like them: Vi, Val, Aiden, Jesse, Celene, Clara
They scare me: V
Avery-writes-stuff chapter 5 . 7/3
Nora: I love her. She didn't do anything wrong at all. Most of the other characters that I've really liked have done bad things, even if I feel bad for them, but she was doing the right thing and still is getting sent into the cut for it. She cares so much about her sister and even though her intro wasn't as shocking as some of the others, I think she's going to be one that I root for once the games start!

Aviv: I almost cried reading this. Aviv is so sweet! He cares so much about his mom and his brother and the only problem is he cares TOO much and now he has to go through all of this because of it. They sent him to jail for stealing a cake? Canada sucks in this world. If Aviv dies I will cry and I'm not saying that to guilt you or anything, but also I think you should please let him win, thank you.

Vi: Rats playing soccer IS pretty funny. And rats as a pet are cute. I liked her, and just like the other two this chapter she doesn't deserve to go to jail AT ALL. I'm officially rooting against Canada during the World Cup from now on. She doesn't stand out as much as the others, but she's still great.

The best of the best: Aviv
The best: Alaina, Kasper
I love them: London, Jules
I like them: Nora, Rory
I don't NOT like them: Vi, Val, Aiden
I don't like them:
They scare me:
Avery-writes-stuff chapter 4 . 7/3
Val: The first half of their story, I was so happy for them. They were being themself and quitting what they didn't like even if it's what was expected of them. It just feels bad that they made that mistake because it seemed like they were turning their life around. But if they were bringing drugs like that into a bar, they might have been having problems already anyways. It's interesting though, I feel like all the characters' problems so far are because of their parents. Except for Jules, but with him even there was the stuff with his brother. Anyways, I liked them.

Kasper: Oh my gosh he KILLED Zak? Kasper noooo. I love him so much. He's stupid and a murderer so I REALLY shouldn't but I do. He didn't have to kill Zak, he didn't even do anything wrong but then... the writing in this part was just the absolute best yet. "It only takes a minute before they're back in the kitchen. Six more and his father is dead." I almost fell out of my chair that was so unexpected. I just loved loved loved Kasper so much here, I think he's my new favorite but him and Alaina are so close I'm calling it a tie.

Rory: Oh my gosh every single person this chapter the crimes just getting more and more intense! A BOMBING? And she killed FOUR people? I want to feel bad for Rory just like everyone else because she's got to feel so guilty but also oh my gosh that's just so so so so awful. Why'd she just break up with her instead of calling the police? I don't mean that in a criticism way, like I know WHY, but still whyyyy Rory?

The best: Alaina, Kasper
I love them: London, Jules
I like them: Rory
I don't NOT like them: Val, Aiden
I don't like them:
They scare me:
Avery-writes-stuff chapter 3 . 7/3
Oh my gosh I am so in LOVE with this story already. You're writing is so so good, like you write it all so simply in a way that I NEVER have to reread it to figure out what you meant, but it's still so pretty. I can't wait to read 19 more chapters of this!

Alaina: Thank you so much to both you and whoever made this character because that first part of her story was something I really needed to read right now. I don't want to spill my guts to you or anything but it just really really felt cathartic to read that. I can relate so much to Alaina and so she's absolutely, 100% my instant-fave. Just the way you wrote her was so perfect, it captured that feeling sooo well of just always being expected to be perfect and then that one time you mess up you feel like you can't say anything because you can't be anything aside from perfect to them. And then her parents didn't do anything to help her? I feel so, so bad for Alaina and I really hope that she can win.

Jules: Maybe I'm just going to like all of these characters a lot. I made a chart with lots of different categories but I might just end up putting all of them at the top. Not that that's a bad thing! Jules is such a fun character. I loved how unique he is with him being a figure skater, and the details about his older brother were such a cool way to flesh out his character. I like him so much but also he scares me a little bit since he doesn't feel sorry for what he did, just that he got caught? I still love him though. "The remnants of the supernova that should have stuck around long enough" is suuuuch a cool line, I loved it so much.

London: Oh my gosh. Oh my gosh. OH MY GOSH. She tried to kill her brother?! That's such a horrible, horrible thing to do but also she thought that she was doing the right thing? Her story hurts my heart so much, I just feel so so so bad for her. That's just the worst thing imaginable. She's kind of like Jules where she's somebody that I shouldn't feel bad for but I just do. I think it's just your writing and they're all going to be like this, aren't they? London is extra special though, I literally felt my heart DROP when I realized what was happening.

Aiden: While Aiden isn't as likable as the other three this chapter were, I still feel really bad for him. He never really had a chance. He reminds me a little bit of Layla, where he's just stuck in a bad situation with no good way out. He isn't a saint, but he doesn't deserve anything like this either.

The best: Alaina
I love them: London, Jules
I like them:
I don't NOT like them: Aiden
I don't like them:
They scare me:

I thought I'd catch up with this tonight but I'm a slower reader than I was a few months ago maybe. We'll see how many more I can read tonight before my eyes can't stay open though because this has been such a fun read so far! Valentine, Rory, and Kasper next!
dyloccupy chapter 22 . 7/1
can’t believe pgs are ovah…like wow what a jumpscare! these kids were just exploring the island and now they boutta die…where did the time go bc fr my mind is blown

as always this interlude SLAPPED and i’m very curious to see the implications of what has transpired

em, pls kill these kids viciously - show NO mercy!

and just remember everyone, if you don’t simp for jules you deserve to die xxx
ladyqueerfoot chapter 22 . 6/30
right so this was sus, but i didn't expect it /not/ to be sus.

y'know, i love zoe just as much as the next gal, but something tell's me she's not going to be very successful in yeeting aviv out of the arena. i think that toronto general is in her future, unfortunately. very curious again what the fuck's up with alexis.

levi and zach was oddly wholesome, even if shit is about to go tf down. levi is just, such a fucking sweetie, and i am sad when he is sad. i hope aviva is alright thru all this. y'know i periodically forget that levan's literally a bomb, but rest assured, you always remind me when i'm most stressed out. i think it'd be interesting if there was a survivor or two this season, but then it'd make me very :hmm: about 3tc. i think the 10th season will be the cut's last, so i'm curious what happens this season in the meantime, subplot wise. i have no fucking clue where niko and nur are but i will assume the set for the hell of it.

alright, next chapter it's time to say bye bye to the kiddos. i suspect there'll be some hard goodbyes, but sometimes competitors have to be eliminated.

*give vito a little smooch on the forehead* it will be okay my sweet son. you will be just fine.

(narrator voice: it was not okay. vito was not just fine.)

blah blah blah, great chapter em - so good wow! i feel like i sound like a broken record at this point, but the point still stands. good luck killing them kiddos xx
david12341 chapter 20 . 6/30
This chapter was so happy and wholesome. Why does that make me think that something awful is about to happen? Oh right, the bloodbath is in two chapters. Ope. Anyways I'm binge-reading all the pre-games right now and will leave a more in depth review once I'm fully caught up but I'm obsessed with this cast. London and Alaina are adorable, Aviv is the goat, and Layla is so smol. I love them all and am not going to be able to handle it when they start killing each other. Also re: the water last chapter in London's pov. Something sketchy happening there, and then the title of the chap being smoke and mirrors. Hm.
ladyqueerfoot chapter 21 . 6/28
yeah, this was fucked up. at least i knew it'd be fucked up? fuck.

rorentine makes me weep. val is just, such a cool fucking character, and you are a bitch for doing them so dirty, but it's also such a good arc. there's something so relatable and so innately queer about wanting to have like a family, and the way you've shown that with val is so fucking bittersweet but genuinely great storytelling. a lot of val hit real close to me today, from them waiting for rory to them just being sad that they're projecting. the last sentence, wow em. that may be one of the hardest hitting one-liners i've read from you, and it just is upsetting me. the way they described rory as a stranger, just fucking... ouch. i hope they resolve their issues, but christ almighty, i'm upset.

we hadn't heard from nora for a while so i was excited to hear from her, even though i knew it'd be depressing. seeing nora's drive to get back to her sister is so sweet of her, and she's just so thick-skinned and such a good kid. the meta of knowing that she won't win and won't see ava ever again makes her hurt a hundred times harder, because she's just such a cool character. momo always pops the fuck off, and there's just something so neat and tangible about nora that i deeply admire. im glad she agrees aviv is soon in for the reality check of the century, i personally think it will be fucking miserable for everyone. there's also the irony in nora going to bed, not knowing how soon this reality check is going to be. fucking hell.

*sighs* hello vito, my son. glad to see you're just like me, delusional and a simp for jules vaudry. i've already said a million times how much i adore him and everything you're doing with him, because just like with vanya, he is to a t, the way i imagined him, and that just makes me upset for the future. the way you took all of my ramblings from a year ago and brought them to life so beautifully is fucking exceptional of you, but christ, vito, you're breaking your mama's (me) little heart over here. him thinking about school and all the things from home that he used to be good at and how they don't matter? that was so well done, but so upsetting. the fact my boy can no longer drown himself in academia and is instead condemned to all of this tragedy and fuckery, oh it makes me so sad. he used to be such a ray of light, but he's devolved into a cynic, nearly like damien, and it is so fucking upsetting. with all of this time on his hands, it makes sense he'd become delusional, especially when he's being funneled false information. i just, fucking adore vito, everything about him. he's so perfect to me even if he's broken. the fact that he thinks he's a monster for all of this too, and his little gay crush on jules? oh poor boy, that's not going to end well. he's just so desperate for comfort, he sees right thru jules' manipulation, and i completely understand him. the part about him wanting to be anonymous, christ i just ;-; vito i love you so much okay? the ending ripped out my guts, god i just wanna hug him and remind him that this isn't his fault. he's my sweet son, i love vito so much i love what you've done with him, i'm not ready for the games and to watch him break further, since you've put him in a spot where he can go in so many directions. god bless, i'm sad again. what a fucking miserable end to these miserable pre-games, i can't wait for it to get worse.

i already dm'd you my bloodbath predicts because i like being secretive, but i will drop my chart for the non-discordians rn, if those even are reading these reviews. these pre-games have been a ride, my friend. i'm very excited for future fuckery and to be broken.

my hero: vito
iconic, showstopping, etc: rory, jules, lev, aviv, val
mwah mwah: sav, jared, nora, london
something is missing but i like what i see: vi, kas
better exists, sorry: dewei, layla, clara, alaina
electric chair: v
ladyqueerfoot chapter 20 . 6/28
yeah so you're fucked up for this chapter. wtf did u do this happy thing for when we both know that you will be fucking this kids up in like two weeks from when im writing this. fuck you!

tbh, sav has fallen off a bit for me since her intro, where i absolutely adored her. i will say tho, i do think she's got a good chance at making it far in the games solely because of how rational she is and she just seems to know what she's doing, and is a lot more hardened then the non murderous kiddos. while she doesn't have any strong alliances thus far, i think she knows enough people to not get her ass beat and i look forwards to her climbing up my chart during the games

layla deserves a nice time ig, i always forget what her deal is but i skimmed her intro and yeah, home girl did nothing wrong. aviv is such a nice and sweet boy, i think if i wasn't like certain layla is going to die in the bloodbath and aviv didn't have sm other buddies, they'd be a nice duo since they both care about their familys lots

god this vi pov was so bittersweet. im glad that all the nice kids sans vito and valrory had a little get together and i just Imagine Them As Normal Kids that would be so nice but alas, you suck for killing them and we suck for sending them to die. im so glad that vi has some nice relationships now after their troubles back at home, but still, knowing it's all going to end soon makes me upset. i am so curious to see how vi progresses as they lose more and more people, or if she gets lost first? idk, she's not my fave but i still enjoy hehe

okay one more i got this
dyloccupy chapter 20 . 6/18
happy birthday jared! might just be your last one!

this was disturbingly soft..i don’t like it ! the way these kids are going to be killing each other very soon…you’re sick for this

literally going insane over these idiot kids fr fr

tysm for writing em, can’t believe i was smiling that hard while reading
dyloccupy chapter 17 . 6/12
haven’t done a proper review in a hot min so what better place to start than my son’s most recent pov?

jules king i adore u sm yes slay girlboss gatekeep manipúlate! the cameras have me soooooooooo he’s trying his best to be cold hearted but we know vito has weaseled his way in…not by much but still! and then interrogating dewei in chp. 19…bruh relax for a second plssss….

anyways love all the pg stuff like the tone has been so mysterious and somber and horror-ish! kasiv still some of my faves ngl! rory and val moved up to favessss too! v and celene have me scared the most tbh…

can’t wait to see what other secrets unfold before the games begin!
ladyqueerfoot chapter 19 . 6/11
69 ahah funny

poor dewei he is so jaded and accepting of how shitty prison is — he’s sweet, but his despondency is so gonna be his downfall. he had his thing w val at first, so maybe that’ll come up again? tbh i doubt it, because every other kid has connections of some sort with the others, and then there’s dewei, which doesn’t bode well for him in the bloodbath. still, i don’t think his story is done. or maybe it is; i guess you’ll tell us.

somebody please get v to therapy like yesterday. or actually therapy is probably not enough so it’s time to put her down boo fucking hoo. like yeah yeah clara did the whole arson thing but maybe arsonists can have a few friends as a treat, no need to be a bitch about it. she is not going to get very far if she decides she’s going to be a bitch to everyone 24/7 lol nobody likes u ma’am xx. at least vanya was smart enough to mask her evil bitch behavior until the games. she was so mean to savannah too and that’s legit inexcusable, savannah is precious and has done nothing wrong ever. i’d say v should take some xanax but i think she’s already had too much of that.

london and alaina are so fucked, this has just been the most miserable slow burn of all time because we know the cut is coming for their asses. they really think they all have it figured out, but as we all know, they do not. london continues to be such a fascinating character. i loved the way she compared the outdoor part of the set to her “priest’s” definition of paradise. that was so smart, and i just dread what’s going to happen to these girls once the games start. i’m thinking alaina’s going to go either in the bloodbath or early on, since london’s more interesting, and it’s going to fuck her the fuck up. this is just so rude.

so yeah, we’ve got 2 more to go an extremely foreboding interlude until the games. that’s just… great. i’m not excited for vito and val to have povs especially. you’re doing a great job btw, i’m going to lose my shit.

haha 69 nice
optimisms chapter 2 . 6/9
Weird, I definitely hadn't read #1 but I've read this one. I guess I read it when the cast list was released. Lots of intrigue and not a lot of information, but I love it. I like the implication that Zach has broken into this email many many times and he's just accepted that he gets booted out each time. I wonder how their source got hold of the shortlist...and I'm wondering what the signature "3" means. And of course, why are there 20? Very very interesting...
optimisms chapter 1 . 6/9
Hi Em! Love seeing all the victors' reactions to the upcoming season, the trauma responses and the friendships between some of the older Victors. I definitely want to go finish Success Stories now, because I can tell I'm missing subtext, particularly with Zoe and Calvin/Elise, but even without that this was a great chapter! I think my favorite section here was Zoe's; I empathize with her character a lot and it was nice to see her friendship with Mina. I also really liked seeing Guiliana's perspective as the one who was new to it all last year and feeling a responsibility to protect Matt this year.
Remus98 chapter 18 . 6/6
𝒪 𝒞𝒶𝓃𝒶𝒹𝒶!
𝒪𝓊𝓇 𝒽𝑜𝓂𝑒 𝒶𝓃𝒹 𝓃𝒶𝓉𝒾𝓋𝑒 𝓁𝒶𝓃𝒹!
𝒯𝓇𝓊𝑒 𝓅𝒶𝓉𝓇𝒾𝑜𝓉 𝓁𝑜𝓋𝑒 𝒾𝓃 𝒶𝓁𝓁 𝑜𝒻 𝓊𝓈 𝒸𝑜𝓂𝓂𝒶𝓃𝒹.

Celene: My daughter is trying really hard to be a detective, isn’t she? Not a dream I had envisioned for her, but I’m not hating it. Fits with skulking around corridors being moody, y’know? I’m finding it interesting that she keeps having interactions with Val and Rory, first observing them by the shoreline and now seeing them here. A coincidence or set-up for something, I wonder. The three of them allying would maybe be the most unexpected thing to come out of this story.

Aviv: I know I said that Dewei is one of the characters I’ve related to the most in any SYOT/SYOC ever, but Aviv is starting to rival him for that position. Constantly apologizing — check. Taking on the blame for everything — check. Never managing to tame his hair — check x 10. I’m glad he managed to talk to Kaspar, for his own peace of mind if nothing else, but I doubt Kas will end up joining his and Nora’s alliance. Maybe later on in the Games, that would be cute!

Clara: It’s nice to see that she’s been able to find some sort of comfort in this place despite V being present. My prediction is still that the two of them will be forced together at some point, but for now she’s free. Making a cake for Jared, or whatever else Vi has in mind, should be a good distraction. Also love how Jared’s POV last chapter directly informed what was going on here. We adore consistency, it makes the story so much more fun to follow :)

Oh no, what is going on with Alexis?! I’m WORRIED.

𝒲𝒾𝓉𝒽 𝑔𝓁𝑜𝓌𝒾𝓃𝑔 𝒽𝑒𝒶𝓇𝓉𝓈 𝓌𝑒 𝓈𝑒𝑒 𝓉𝒽𝑒𝑒 𝓇𝒾𝓈𝑒,
𝒯𝒽𝑒 𝒯𝓇𝓊𝑒 𝒩𝑜𝓇𝓉𝒽 𝓈𝓉𝓇𝑜𝓃𝑔 𝒶𝓃𝒹 𝒻𝓇𝑒𝑒!
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