good chapter x3

good chapter x2

good chapter

Sehr gute Geschichte, bitte mehr

I’m kind of hoping they bring the Going Merry back to her home island, i feel that’s a better end than being set on fire in the middle of the ocean. Oh shit, this will be great fight. I know Aokiji left the marines later on, any chance he’ll join the strawhats?

This chapter is already worlds better played out than the last one!

I assume the last chapter was just a formatting error or something, looking forward to more of this story!

Ok this chapter was really hard to read with several people all speaking in large blocky paragraphs.

The story is interesting so far, my only complaint is that you have several instances where multiple people speak in the same paragraph.

It is always better to start a new paragraph anytime someone else verbally speaks, even if they are having a conversation.

It can get rather confusing for the reader and breaks immersion.

Again I’m enjoying the story and just wanted to mention the only real issues I’ve seen so far.

Glad that Luffy took care of Foxy and the Foxy Pirates, since that guy and his crew are really annoying. It'll be interesting if the Going Merry will be able to be fixed or not and I wonder how the fight between Aokiji and the Straw Hats will go (unless only Luffy fights him, since he's the strongest)

Looks like Luffy's really trying to make his crew even stronger, so that they're all ready for the New World and it'll be interesting if they'll all be strong enough to face off against and beat the Pacifista's when they arrive at the Sabaody Archipelago, or if Kuma will still send them flying, like he did in the anime

so it turns out to be a complete repetition of the canon with some deviations and the addition of romance, lemon?

ahh i was hope there will be no usopp in team, sad

Great Chapter

Well, looks like Vivi will need to train in how to use her new Devil Fruit powers and it'll be interesting if anyone will eat the Goro Goro Devil Fruit or if they'll sell it (which might come back to bite them in the ass, especially if they're attacked by whoever ate it). On boy, it would seem that Aokiji is looking for them, which means he's either after Robin or Vivi or both (Robin for what she knows and maybe Vivi so that she's taken back to Alabasta to face the crimes for what she's done being a pirate)

Loving this! please update (if you can. i understand if you can't)