hey there, its screwthefates again. this chapter was amazing and I cant wait for the next one. this story has honestly become the highlight of my week. keep up the great writing and hopefully we'll get an extra chapter this weekend

Ahh okay
So Percy is going to stay there for 1 earth year?
But won't gaea be done with her war within a month? Or Percy beating Tartarus meant she'd have to put her plans on hold for the time being?

great chapter, will be become a god?

Please keep annabeth and Percy together

this is the best book ever fr

eyo, my man this is lit but i dont get it is his domain the tartarean itself? how will it help him on the surface and is he immortal at this point or smth? plus bro percy with the coa took on armies of monsters and proceeded to battle titans fling himself of pegasi in midair to kill a flying pig caused hurricanes and shit, it stands to reason that this shit should be even more op but so far it doesnt really seem so, your stories really really good mate i like the plot and everything the only thing ill critique is power scaling, if he can do all that with the blessing of a single river that wasnt even being controlled by the og goddess, he should be able to do a hell of a lot more then be tired af after killing three gorgons and fighting a glorified mutt god and getting injured so much and being tired, power scaling is very imp in stories like this so you should be careful, other then that pacing is good, dialogue is good, characterization very good youve stayed true to the snarkiness of percy and havent turned him into a lapdog which is good, overall I'd give this story a solid 7.5/10 with a point taken down for power scaling being a bit wonky, so great job! Other then that i dont think percy should be with annabeth in this story, in a cut throat world like this and even in the og pjo books i felt she held him back more often then not what with her pride and all, plus look at the akhlys scene a chick trying to kill you with poisons and you're literally guilt tripping your bf into sparing her like wtf? in a world like pjo you need every adv you can get and what does she do hold him back, no one can argue with me when i say one of the majn reasons percys afraid of his powers and didnt develop them as well as he should have was his fear of what ppl will think and annabeth all but confirmed that in the pit "somethings arent meant to be controlled" like fuck off just cuz your a weak pleb means i have to be one too? the whole glass ball breaking thing as well i felt that depicted percy breaking through his limits and rick teased it like a bastard and then never did anything with it. I always felt in the books percy could've been so much more if he wasnt always so worried of what other ppl will think of him and rick wasted a lot of potential w him, even going so far as to almost completely discard him in the final book so his new mediocre characters had a chance to shine, anyways rant over keep it up

Surprised he chose not give her Elysium

I like this so far but people's memories are what make them who they are. I'm tired of stories where percy loses his and then decides to kill all his friends. It feels too OOC.

This is genuinely one of the best stories I've read in a long while. Possibly the best one I've ever read that involves primordials and power levels of this nature. Anyway it deserves so much more appreciation and I can't wait to see where this goes. I've been reading since the first chapter came out and honestly I'm incredibly impressed with how much you've done with the story. The writing is impeccable and bar a few spelling errors (which are few and far between) its truly an amazing thing to read. While I won't bother you too much with questions I would like to extend my services as a beta reader/editor seeing as you currently don't have one anymore. If you're interested let me know in your next chapter or feel free to pm me when you're available. Once again great story and can't wait for the next update!

love the story so far

why is the entire chapter in italics

marvelous cant wait for our boy percy to put the gods in there place, they be way too arrogant

That clears some lore to a good extent I think
However, the 1 day to 7 years doesn't make sense because the seven took weeks to reach the house of Hades but it wasn't decades for Percy and Annabeth

Fairly cool, if a bit vague but this is still intro,

I've got to say although this isn't the first Percy stuck in Tartarus story I've read it's without a doubt one of the more original and creative ones.