Is Dabi/Toya still alive, or did All For One kill him or turn him into a Nomu after taking his Fire Quirk?

Is Tartarus still secure, or did the “new government” already release all its inmates?

I can’t believe that the HPSC left any copy of that video intact?

Shame that Ryuko is dead! What about Nejire, Mirio, and Tamaki?

“Hero Safety Protection Commission HSPC”

HPSC Hero Public Safety Commission

Awesome work please continue the story

I mean their not wrong with everything AFO has done, just kill him and be done with it. I get that the others have issues with that but like price once said "you draw the line wherever you need it. We get dirty and the rest of the world stays clean."

It's kinda dumb that they are debating on whether or not they should kill AFO. Especially after he literally took over Japan and is responsible for likely thousands of deaths since.

These Idiots still want to hold back. Why?!

Maybe he'll become 10 tails in final fight oh and obliterate afo with bijudama

Good chapter

I'm stoked you killed off that douche instakill style twice that is some top lvl awesome XD

I've managed to binge this story within several hours' time. I gotta agree with Luciendar - even though your story is well written with sparse mistakes throughout, I couldn't help but to oftentimes notice how sloppy your storytelling would be.

The plot felt much too rushed and many characters, I feel, weren't allotted the proper screen time to have their characters develop. I did consider this in the context of the story being Naruto-centered, but despite that, I would still say that the story felt, outside of the early moments around Izuku, and later Mirko, quite rushed. It was less paced writing and more of "Naruto did a thing, everyone liked that; Naruto did another thing, and woah big reaction", and so on. I understand it's a gargantuan demand to ask for the entirety of the world to be built in a super detailed and nuanced fashion, but I think it's something you could've expanded on at the very least. Some of that, along with a few slower chapters containing meaningful interactions, could have offered the story a better flow rather than what felt like dumping major plot point after major plot point on the reader(s). It can get smothering at times for your audience, or at least those who like a bit more immersion when reading. That's not to say that you should've fixated entirely on world building or slowed down chapters, as too much of that would probably be too boring, but what I'm saying is that your story lacks that sort of balance, in my honest opinion. You don't need to lay on the heavy details or super descriptive moments, but taking a bit more time to acknowledge or elaborate on big shifts or small scale events might help to make your writing feel less blunt, which is how it is currently - quite blunt. Development feels too forced with how quickly the reader gets blasted with events. I get that you may want to make the most out of a chapter post, but fluffing up your story or adding a little bit of tasteful padding wouldn't hurt, given how much whiplash the progression can inflict. It's already clear you have good foundations in storytelling, so these are more or less just some thoughts for you to consider. I do hope you do so.

Regardless, I don't mean any of this harshly, after all - no writer is an absolute paragon of the art, which is a part of the beauty of it, but sometimes flaws do need to be acknowledged, and criticism offered. Perhaps you've already realized the points I've made and wrote this story with the intention of having this pacing. I'd be none the wiser. Anyways, I'll be sticking around of course, to enjoy more of the stories and ideas you've got going on. I hope to see you grow as a writer, whether in this story or later ones, only time with tell. All I'll say is: keep it up!

And remember to take care! See you in the next one :)

Wow, so this was basically Naruto vs Sasuke at the valley of the end but reversed slightly. Naruto is now Sasuke and Izuku is Naruto. Which, in case you were wondering makes Naruto's whole ideology during his childhood seem like hypocrisy with the way he's acting. This Naruto probably would've left with Orochimaru.

And the worst thing is how bipolar he seems. Honest to God, Naruto with Rumi and the Naruto with his classmates might as well be two different people.

Look, you're a great story teller. I appreciate how inventive you are. But this story...

I mean, you bring your own rule about no chakra. I mean, Kyubi is pure chakra. That's it. He has no soul, nothing tangible that could be carried on in genetics.

I just don't understand how you wrote this and Renegade. This story is just so bad. Your Naruto is so OOC for himself that it's not funny and you've given us no real reason for this. He's afraid to lose his family. I get that. But he's still a shinobi and you have him acting like some pissy kid.

I'm not saying it's all bad as it has several redeeming features. But it's not good. You should've just let him have chakra so everything else you're doing with him makes sense.

And no one was around. Way too convenient. This is just sloppy writing.

How does the demon form work without chakra? You're not making sense again.