Reviews for Systematic Shinobi |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Just followed a reference to this story with the provided link and am looking forward to reading the rest. Thanks for posting. |
![]() ![]() ![]() i feel attacked for some reason... |
![]() ![]() ![]() ...Oh, did he forget to tell Jiryira that? Pure gold! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I've enjoyed this story along more than I expected to going into it. Keep up the good work! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thanks for the chapter |
![]() ![]() ![]() Love the story as always |
![]() ![]() ![]() Sigh. Yeah as much as I love Lee this is a pretty good analysis of him. Never training to fight without his weights is stupid and I've never seen him remove them again. Though keeping a couple tons attached to you while you fight will still give you lots of momentum in normal combat. And I'll say the mental aspects are also on point. Much as I love Lee, if I saw someone destroying themselves for a minor event like this in real life I would also be disappointed in them. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hi bro. Great to see Naruto getting some attention from Daiki. Like fking finally man. Also is t it ironic how Naruto gets talk no jutsu used on him? Great stuff. cheers Keep Writing |
![]() ![]() Chapter 3 A bit to easy? Well I mean, it's fine that it was easy, cant expect everything to be an epic battle, but it seemed like it was just going through the motions, with half the encounter explaining how 'suprising' of how easy it was. Idk, would of been cool if he felt some sort of emotional turmoil from, idk, stabbing people in the throat and cutting someone's head off. Especially as a 13 year old like jeez, though I guess he went through desensitised training and idk how old he was in his past life? Still though. Even then, would of been good if the mc had some sort of slip up to get his arrogant ass to be smacked down a little. Like him accidently running into a trap or ninja wire or something. Using the tags to set a bomb trap was cool though. And even though you can get lucky, him getting a lightning technique? Kinda wish he would first show what he has learnt currently before moving on to developing his chakra nature. Dont need to make it to easy for him. |
![]() ![]() Chapter 1-2 Interesting so far! I like where he starts in the story, I hope he doesn't just blitz through training so we can see his steady improvements in missions or something. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Okay I am loving this story but I am drawing a line at Shisui still having a corpse. A dead body under water would bloat and float to the surface and thus would not stay underwater long and thus float away. It would also only last a week or two before scavengers have ripped it to pieces both underwater or at the surface. And as for it lasting at least 7 years because Shisui was "built different" everything in Naruto is "built different!" All the scavengers live in a chakra world and thus would have the capability to devour a chakra rich body. Having said that I am absolutely going to keep reading this completely broken story with a main character that is a lucky ass SOB. Great work with this and now on to the next chapter! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey man. Sorry to read about the crap life threw your way. Thank you for sharing this great story with us and also candidly sharing your life updates. You're a really funny author and it shows in your characters. I love the way this story is going and the by-play between Daiki and Ten Ten, Sasuke, Kakashi and of course Isobro. I know you said something about socials but the way you write them is amazing and i love the character development. I also really love gamer stories and the way this has been going is just amazing. Great that you have truncated stats and skills to just be focused on the proficiencies and damn the descriptionflavour text is just perfect! Great stuff. You should work for Larian or something. Hope life deals a much better hand to you and yours moving forward Keep Writing |
![]() ![]() Just thought of something: Since Daiki always makes Naruto transform into a naked Naruko when he trains him... wouldn't it be funny if that becomes so ingrained in his subconsciousness that Naruto ends up only being able to use his Jinchiruki abilities when he transforms accordingly? Or maybe even to the point where he automatically turns into naruko whenever he taps into the Ninetail's power? |
![]() ![]() Bro has a personal vendetta against Kurenai |
![]() ![]() Bro got that Harrizzment |