Is Hinata going to be so incredibly mentally fragile this whole story? Over 700K words to get though will be a very hard read if she doesn't get it together quick.

I randomly stumbled upon this story and noticed it had been completed rather recently. On a whim, I began to read it.

I do not regret doing so. That is the first part of what I would like to say.

As of now, I have only reached the end of "Part 1", the beginning of the time skip, and wished to note my feelings on the entire first half of this story. I am certain a majority of the positives are going to be sticking around, but I'll start with those first anyway.

The biggest positive I have to say is your characterization of many of the main characters. You've really grasped their personalities well, down to early Naruto's goofy and wild nature mixed with his genuine care for everything around him. The way he interacts with people, even his first interaction with Sasuke turning into boasting about Hinata and trying to be sensitive about Sasuke losing Itachi, was very well done.

In a way you bring the personalities closer to what they should be than the original did at some points; having more room to describe their feelings and /why/ they're doing something, since this is text and not pictures.

Which brings to the next point of how you handle descriptions and paint a picture with each of your scenes. It isn't perfect, of course, there were a few where I couldn't quite grasp where everyone was, but that was probably more on me. However, the way to describe movements and the way they are happening, such as Hinata's many fluid and 'perfected' attacks, was well done.

You do it well, though do tend to repeat yourself, at least at this point. The repeated scenes, such as Naruto's "Rendan" combo, are still well described with each attack being emphasized by his words. It's somewhat unique; most I've seen just have them all combined into one paragraph, rather than separated by the words; an amusing idea for something he does only once or twice.

Then there's the story. Overall, I have no love for Kaguya or any of the reincarnation business. That idea, and Black Zetsu's odd existence, felt ... hollow in the original. It felt like it undermined the whole adventure once again, as many small scenes did. But...

I think your version of it, so far, is far more positive to me. You've built it into your own story and have built the world and its powers up around it, rather than sourcing it all to one "alien tree" or anything like that. Divinity has always been a popular ideal in every culture and in a universe with ninja wizards; having them be real just... makes sense.

Kali is also a good original character. She's not quite a mary-sue type, despite her victory over Itachi, as she has flaws. Weaknesses and not all of the answers. She's a good measuring stick for what Hinata has to get to, but isn't a playable character at all outside of protecting Hinata's brain. I do hope this continues, though I wouldn't be surprised of her sacrificing herself to save Hinata or something. Guess we'll see if I'm right, later.

Additionally, I loved the addition of Tayuya; my favorite minor character. Her being an Uzumaki was highly speculated, given her red hair, and I'm glad you decided to include it. While I also mourned the loss of her Doki, being her original technique, I understand the lack of them makes scenes easier to control. Not to mention she gets to punch and move a lot more than she normally would.

I do hope she continues to be a strong character in the story as a support for Naruto and Hinata; and they as a supporting family for her. As I said before too, you did a great job with the personalities and Tayuya was no different. It truly felt like she was the same character... just away from the creepy snake.

As a side about techniques, I believe the world's Tenketzu was a great way to handle an upgraded Byakugan; right down to how it would interact with something like Samehada. The beginning fight with Neji, where Hinata breaks the rocks, really reminded me of Ranma 1/2's "Breaking Point" technique, too; something I planned on using myself in a thing, but never got around to.

Great work.

Now, the small negatives I have are mostly ... petty, I think. But I hope they don't come across as a distaste for the story you've written so far. Just observations that I feel could have used more fleshing out for both the reader and the characters.

The first is, well, the characters themselves. Several are simply missing; Jiraiya and Sakura are mentioned, but never given a scene. I suspect Jiraiya will at least show up later, but he does not have a single line. It's odd, given his closeness with Naruto and the sudden lack of training for the Rasengan.

While I'm sure this could be explained away with Naruto focusing on his tree-powers, and you not wanting to just rely on the Rasengan as many writers do, it feels... a little lonely. With Kakashi gone to Suna, Hiruzen busy, and Jiraiya missing; it felt a bit sad for Naruto. But, of course, all that said, it's not his story.

It's Hinata's story. So, overall, it's a minor point that Jiraiya was missing.

Back to other missing things, Gaara's disappearance and lack of closure with his situation is... odd. I'm sure that'll come up later, but I'm always curious how people would write Gaara losing to someone that isn't Naruto. After all, that's what "fixes" him, so to speak. It's what finally lets him rest, knowing that someone suffering like he did wasn't a monster, so he didn't have to be either.

But Hinata wasn't that. She was struggling, but not like he did. So I was expecting it to come up sooner, rather than later, but it's probably for the best. Without the sudden Sound 4/5 thing kidnapping Sasuke, Gaara didn't have a reason to come back just yet.

On the same note of Gaara's situation, I'm surprised Baki was killed so... ruthlessly. Not a favorite character by any means, but he was still a presence I figured would matter later... But maybe it's better this way anyway; if Yugao becomes a major player, I'm sure Baki being dead gives her some closure, given how he kills Hayate... assuming he did that in this one.

As another note for characters... Itachi controlling Hiruzen feels a bit dirty. While I understand it, we're never given real closure on if Hiruzen is being completely mind controlled or if Itachi really did make a deal with him. We are told he pushes Hiruzen to deal with Danzo, but never anything else. It leaves a dirty taste even if Itachi is a "good guy", y'know?

The last thing I think I have had a minor issue with that isn't story related, as most of my issues will probably be given closure later, is rest time and techniques.

To be blunt, a lot of stuff happens really, /really/ fast. Even with the natural healing, it feels like Hinata goes from one fight to the next, running on fumes the whole time, and still manages to pull out a win. Which isn't /bad/, but some of them felt like they could use a little bit of a break.

A break that could, and probably should, have been used on experimenting and training techniques. She does most of this off screen early on, which is fine, by training in her mind with Kali. But early on in the Chunin exams, you also have a weird note of "this technique she never wanted to use in a fight!" or "never got to use it in a fight yet" and it's like...

Yeah, of course she hasn't, silly. This is literally her first fight since getting her new eyes.

After that though, both her and Naruto just sorta... throw techniques out like crazy without much reason or any implications they learned them somehow. Some impressions from their chakra-ghosts could be giving them those abilities, but you never really expand on that.

There's also how Kyuubi shows up and goes "Hey, Seed Style, you idiot!" Which wasn't /bad/; his line about "Fight like yourself, Naruto! Not them!" is totally on point, but wasn't really expanded on beyond the abilities Naruto was spamming instead of focusing on his normal techniques. There was no real build up to it outside of a brief mention at the start, far as I could tell, but I could have missed somethin'.

None of that is bad, per say, it's just a bit clustered with techniques after techniques coming out of the literal wood work.

All that said, they typically flow well into the fights scenes that have all been well done. Hinata's scenes are far easier to follow than Naruto's scenes, given that trees are rough to think about sprouting like crazy, but still they work well. I tend to just overlook what the Technique's name is and focus on what it does, though.

... And there's probably a bunch of other positives and negatives, mostly positives, I could throw at you, but I've probably said too much anyway. I do apologize for leaving such a number of petty negatives though. Your pacing with the story hasn't been bad and you do a great job painting a picture.

But when the little details start getting covered up, they fester in my brain, y'know?

Regardless, I'm looking forward to finishing it, even if I have to deal with arrogant fire goddesses being chumps.

Oh, as a final side, I'll never take Amaterasu seriously. 'Cause in my mind, she'll always be a cute little dog running around and painting things. Thanks, Okami.

Congrats on finishing the story and I look forward to finishing it!

I'll probably write another one once I reach the end. Happy resting!

~Yasha-HebiHime

ill be honest the rest nof the story was good so far but this is over the top and not even by a little.

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Woo another fanfic for the Community’s “completed” pile

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This was one HELL of a story! Poor Rin, she got replaced in Obito’s heart!

I wonder what happened to the children of Amaterasu and Obito

Thank you for writting this, genuinely was a blast from start to finish even if I only got caught up around 20 chapters before the end. I love the way you handled the characters both enemies and allies with unique powers that genuinely felt like evolutions of their canon selves with emphasis on the effect Hinata's actions has on them (Kabuto being a star among them for the Hinata side of things with a much better send off than canon, though Nagato's was the most cool and I love the idea of the upper paths though I would call them "outer" if it was up to me as tendo/shurado are upper realms and those who are enlightened are outside the realms ie outer). Your descriptions were fantastic especially nearing the end with your choices of words making every action feel important and the fights with the gods and Nagato's upper paths really sold that otherworldlyness and gradually throughout these fights you can see the main trio act in a similar way to them which is incrediby different to how the story started off and is a cool juxtapose. Really interested in your next story and what fandom it will take place in!

A beautiful end, and one I'm not ashamed to admit shedding tears of joy while reading. I'd like to believe that if I were present in this timeline, I'd be someone who Naruto and Hinata could count on to act as the "fun uncle" to Akko.

May this world see peace reign for all time.

THIS WAS A PHENOMENAL CONCLUSION MAN!

Seeing everyone live in peace felt so well earned! Hell, I still remember the day the story first dropped and every new chapter just continued to expand upon new ideas time after time! Along with it, taking us along a journey with various characters new and old.

Kali by far was my absolute favorite, her sacrifice still got me feeling something lol.

Seeing Akko and all the other characters being around and kicking, especially Nagato, Gaara, and etc was smile inducing.

Finally, the lovers themselves. Hinata looks even more beautiful being an adoptive mother of Akko while having her eye covered, furthermore, your characterization of Hinata was absolutely flawless, you kept her kind hearted nature in tune for the entire story and never once did it feel out of place!

You can bet your bottom dollar I will be tuning into your next project! Once again, thank you for this outstanding story that takes an iconic character and turns her into a genuine Heroine! Until next time mate.

It is so bittersweet that Hinata hime lost her eye but man, that collage and tribute to all the friends and allies she's had in her life helping her out, it was very very touching and worth it. A fitting end!

I gotta say, it feels so good to finally read a thorough conclusion of Hinata Hyuga being the hero.

Beautiful display of your Tenseigan and absolutely great way to close out the battles of Naruto and Sasuke in this great story! Not once did they ever felt upstate, for the both of them were absolutely needed at all times!

You're constant efforts to give them abilities never seen before in canon or in fanon just shows the true testament to that fact!

By the way, I love how to kept having Naruto acknowledge how much he loves Hinata verbally! My man has matured a long way besides combat wise and many authors so seldom grant him this type of development!

Only two more chapters of this grand story to go!

That was a fantastic story. Can't wait for what's next.