Reviews for The Last Piece |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Just a sugesstion- don't use so may parentheses. They are annoying. They could easily be replaced with commas or aren't needed in the first place. Also, I don't think your Draco is very in charachter. I don't know, he just doesn't sound right, and neither does Harry. Also, your plot is a little cliche, been done a million times. This is not a flame, but constructive criticism. |
![]() ![]() ![]() OH! I LOVED this chapter! It was, without a doubt, the best one you've ever written! Everything was just lovely, and so incredibly romantic, and wonderful, and so funny! I laughed so much! I loved to read this, and it was not too long! I enjoyed every word! Me loved, loved, loved everything! And, for your little survey, I'm a girl! (Oh... I meant to tell you, I COMPLETELY sympathizes with Draco when he was packing, and no one understood why he needed to bring so much clothes. I get that all the time when I'm going somewhere! I mean... You have to have enough clothes, you never know what can happen, right!) |
![]() ![]() ![]() I LOVE THIS CHAPTER! Everything about It was wonderful! I love Narcissa and her new lova affair and harry and Draco are as cute as ever! I Cant wait to see what the gift is! P.S. Im a girl lol |
![]() ![]() ![]() omg ur storie is so cool i have read it from start to chapter 16 it is so good i like the way u make it in dracos point of veiw im em so adding ur storie to meh faves i hope u update soon i think draco is byeing harry sum thing so they can b kinky and i think ron will win the chess game i hope to c an update soon !~.:JaMeS:.~! AKA MysticalDragon |
![]() ![]() ![]() You call this short i call it long mine are twice as short as these and i say its long enough! keep writing |
![]() ![]() ![]() The contents of Narcissa's Howler were quite different than what I expected. I'm more partial to a cold, vindictive Narcissa, but this one works as well. Ron playing chess with Narcissa should prove to be interesting. My vote goes to Cissa winning, as Ron in general tends to get on my nerves. I can't think of what Draco would get Harry for a present. I agree, most fics always seem to have the cliched snake or lion theme (my favourite being the snakes *g*). Maybe something Quidditch related? Though that's probably been done to death as well -_- . Cheers on another great chapter! I look forward to the next update! Take care! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I think this chapter was really good! And It was not too short, if you had that big/awful project to do! I'm sorry for taking so long to read/review this! But I'm very busy in school now, and now I'm FINALLY able to read all the fanfics that's been updated! 1) I have no idea! (I'm VERY slow today, and can't think properly!) 2) I think Ron will win! 3) the chapter was original enough! But I think the next one will be even more original as the Christmas seems to become something really speciall for Harry and Draco this year! You're amazing! Keep up the good work! |
![]() ![]() ![]() O... Verry interesting. I always look for the details. They make the story for me. Ok, I'm not even gonna guess what Draco is gonna give harry for christmas... I like surprises. The chess match between Ron and Narcissa... I bet Ron. No clue why. lol! And I love the idea of them spending christmas at a muggle ski resort... Oh the posibilitys... *Evil grin* Looks great still! UPDATES ALWAYS GOOD! |
![]() ![]() ![]() 1) I have no idea what Draco got Harry 2) I think that Ron will win (he has to win, it's just the way he is . . . i guess) 3) This cahpter was okay . . . okay fine, it was greatly pleasing pynk |
![]() ![]() ![]() But WHAT is Draco's peresent for Harry? And Harry's presentS for everybody? And Ron's and Hermione's and Dummbledore's and Snape's and the giant squid's and Voldemort's... Hrr, Yes. You see the point. Does Draco'smother even KNOW how to play chess? *evil grins* |
![]() ![]() Hey! Sorry I haven't reviewed for a long time (I just found the story again. I don't know why I never saw it when it was updated before) Anyway, as it's been a while and there are quite a few chapters that I needed to read and I can't do it all tonight *pout* I thought I'd review what I've read and that I'm still here, jsut temporarily lost. I loved the chapters and tell your beta her love scene was very nice and tasteful. Draco's date for Harry was so cute and I agree with Hermione, I wish someone would do something like that for me! *_* |
![]() ![]() ![]() Soprry I haven't reviewed as faithfully as I should've, I've been rather crazed myself, but I have been keeping up with every update and I love the story. I thought the chap was great as well. Keep up the great work and I can't wait to read more! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey, I liked Draco reeling in Ron. I'm back from holiday so if you want to send me the next to look over, feel free. Can't wait to see if my guess is right, but I'll keep it to myself until you tell us... hehehe... toodles. |
![]() ![]() ![]() OH YEAH! FLOFF! _ great job! i thought this chapter was very good! nice and fluffy! _~ i cant wait till next chapter! now... for #1... i have NO idea... -_-;; like... i dunno... a snake? (very big cliche ya know? i mean... everyone gives harry a snake in some form or another... and since i dun remember if you have or not yet [you probably did and i just dun remember -_-;] i thought now would probably be the time ne?) but ur probably gonna do something way kewl and origoinal right? hm... ron vs. narcissa... NARCISSA ALL THE WAY! _~ ya so need to puncture ron's enormouse head... especially if you like make narcissa be all 'oh... well im not very good at chess... go easy on me' and then have her kick his ass! then the rest of the trip have ron challenging her to a rematch! _*jumps up and down excitedly* i cant wait! hm... was this chapter origional enough? YES! _ great job! i give you 120 points for origonality! continue son! great job so far! _ |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hehehe... I liked this chapter, though it was a little obvious that Draco would win the match. Good job. |