Good three chapters

Beautiful

Good

Wrote review before finishing chapter... my bad! Gunnery Seargeant is a Marine ranking distinction. I would now suggest changing Navy to Marines... or whichever is better for you.

Just found your story today and am enjoying the premise.

(1) A tiny bit of constructive criticism. I noticed in the beginning chapters your points of view are tad mixed upI did this'... becomes 'He did that' within combined moments. Whilst it is fine to switch from first person view to 3rd person view, it is not good to do that within same moments in time. The subject was clear though so I totally knew what you were trying to convey.

(2) This chapter needs a correction. The US Navy does not have Sergeants. You should change Sergeant to 'Petty Officer'. No worries, many folks don't understand that each branch of military have different verbiage for rankings. I only understand because of family being in Navy and Army. LOL

HAPPY WRITING! Keep up the good work, your ideas are solid and interesting!

This is a good story.

Heck yea! I hope the Dursley's get arrested for what they did to poor Harry! Justice for Harry!

I liked

I really like this story please continue

Bill would have been still in hogwarts if Harry was still 4 because it will make him be like 30 by the time Harry is hogwarts.

Should had made it an mpreg and had James gave birth to Harry. If he in love with gibbs it makes him gay. Even better had James blood adopted Harry because it makes lily seems like a harlet and a slut that betrays her husband with any other man! Making snape his godfather bad idea he would had rather give Harry to voldy than raise him! Snape joined the death eaters willing and willing killed, raped,torturer, and abuse children willing! There is no redeeming him! He should had been rotting in prison with the rest of the death eaters

Great start to a story. There are some misspelled words, but nothing major. I can easily see the Dursleys doing something like this.

I love it and I hope you continue it more Because I want to know what happens next. So please continue it !

Hey author,
Love the idea of this story and really surprised its so unknown. Hope you keep writing as I think this is a great concept and you’ll be able to take it somewhere awesome!

Good story
Continued