Reviews for Little Lightning DiNozzo
James Birdsong chapter 29 . 9/20/2022
Good three chapters
James Birdsong chapter 26 . 9/8/2022
vgamit2103 chapter 28 . 9/8/2022
Lauraf68 chapter 25 . 9/2/2022
Wrote review before finishing chapter... my bad! Gunnery Seargeant is a Marine ranking distinction. I would now suggest changing Navy to Marines... or whichever is better for you.
Lauraf68 chapter 25 . 9/2/2022
Just found your story today and am enjoying the premise.

(1) A tiny bit of constructive criticism. I noticed in the beginning chapters your points of view are tad mixed upI did this'... becomes 'He did that' within combined moments. Whilst it is fine to switch from first person view to 3rd person view, it is not good to do that within same moments in time. The subject was clear though so I totally knew what you were trying to convey.

(2) This chapter needs a correction. The US Navy does not have Sergeants. You should change Sergeant to 'Petty Officer'. No worries, many folks don't understand that each branch of military have different verbiage for rankings. I only understand because of family being in Navy and Army. LOL

HAPPY WRITING! Keep up the good work, your ideas are solid and interesting!
James Birdsong chapter 27 . 8/27/2022
This is a good story.
JojosBizarreHellhole chapter 11 . 8/13/2022
Heck yea! I hope the Dursley's get arrested for what they did to poor Harry! Justice for Harry!
shunshu chapter 26 . 8/2/2022
I liked
Jessicaanderic12 chapter 26 . 8/2/2022
I really like this story please continue
rsroar1017 chapter 9 . 8/1/2022
Bill would have been still in hogwarts if Harry was still 4 because it will make him be like 30 by the time Harry is hogwarts.
rsroar1017 chapter 8 . 8/1/2022
Should had made it an mpreg and had James gave birth to Harry. If he in love with gibbs it makes him gay. Even better had James blood adopted Harry because it makes lily seems like a harlet and a slut that betrays her husband with any other man! Making snape his godfather bad idea he would had rather give Harry to voldy than raise him! Snape joined the death eaters willing and willing killed, raped,torturer, and abuse children willing! There is no redeeming him! He should had been rotting in prison with the rest of the death eaters
stevem1 chapter 1 . 8/1/2022
Great start to a story. There are some misspelled words, but nothing major. I can easily see the Dursleys doing something like this.
kenziekenz1997 chapter 26 . 7/31/2022
I love it and I hope you continue it more Because I want to know what happens next. So please continue it !
TheLostVoyager chapter 26 . 7/29/2022
Hey author,
Love the idea of this story and really surprised its so unknown. Hope you keep writing as I think this is a great concept and you’ll be able to take it somewhere awesome!
irislxi chapter 26 . 7/25/2022
Good story
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