Reviews for Is it Wrong to Try to Stay the Farthest Away from the Dungeon? |
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![]() ![]() ![]() First of all my late condolences and wish you the best!Now about the story.I could say the story is really amazing in pacing and most characters from Original verse are really well made. The connection between Aiz and Bell in this fic is the best and it made me respect and like Aiz as a character again after long time. Now the issue is that Oc. Well what I could say about him. Aside that he has a good biography, nothing good more I could say. First of all, you are telling that he is not so op and there is a character who will be rivalling him typical bulshit. You are clearly making him a character who can do whatever he wants and really it pisses. Also his personality is so cringe and irritating that I wonder how he is still alive in this world. After telling such things to Syr, I should at least say that he should be beaten by all waitresses in the tavern including Mia. But you make people who is near to him and interacted too differently from original story. Mis being feeling nervous near to him?Really?She could easily go without any fear to face damn Ottar who is the strongest and if you say there is 1 adventurer who could rival our Oc is only him. Then you should make Oc stronger than everybody in the city but it already makes him typical Oc from a lot of fanfics. And other waitresses who would ready to attack if somebody at least say something bad about Syr anf risk their life, are tying to ignore and even try to befriend Pc is nonsense. The same goes to Raul who was ready to die for Finn and for hos friends was afraid of death makes me laugh. Raul would never reveal the location of Aiz, but meeh… we need to show how cool and strong is our Oc which really looks funny. Now personality of Oc. Tell me did Meteria someday dropped him or somebody stole his sweet when he was child or what?I can understand that he doesn’t want to interact with others and more Syr, but can‘t he just ignore or be calm?I know that you want to explain his past, but it is looks unbelievable that he is like that and he wants to solve just his issues. So make him reasonable and stoic person and not just agro-school bully whom you decided to put in Tavern just to develop his ship with Ryu. Now goes this one. You were telling that you don’t belive to such ship Development between Ryu and Bell yeah?Well it is at least reasonable than making ship between two don’t Even know each other at all. And Ryu who will for surely become in love with him first will be the most weirdest idea ever. Here you will just replace Bell and make him prince who will save Ryu(You will be trying to argue it, but let’s be honest it will end like this for sure). Relationship between Ryu and Bell was built before but it developed in next chapters. Go read extra chapters which showed it and not just try to argument by saying that Ryu and Oc have similar stories and had traumas while Bell completely is not suitable since he didn’t face like they did. Bell was made to be pure person and that is why everybody loves him even though he might boring. But he at least can be interesting and really can believe why most women love him. Now the fact that Oc is irritated that many think about him as Bell. Really why he can‘t just ignore it?I feel that everytime other tell about Bell and Him, he just wants to kill this person which is stupid. Now you plan to do their meeting sooner or later which will be unbelievable.I will be very disappointed if they become brothers goofy at the end of story because it is impossible with the personality of Oc who even though becomes kinder a bit(he needs therapy huge), Bell should still at least beat the shit out of him after all he did and will do to others. But hey we have strongest Oc who will destroy every other adventurer alltogether right?Pfff, now after he killed Dragon, Bell won‘t become hero at all(Don‘t tell me shit that his goal is different, because the reason to build Bell and his ability was to beat Dragon at the end and now after everything happened, I don’t see it all unless you will put another boss). You just really replacing him which is really disappointing. And I am surprised how talks with the gods. Does he have balls or was really dropped by Meteria before?Even though he is demigod, the simple confidence and how he talks equally to them is nonsense at all. Gods are respected by every adventurer and other living beings. They are creators so the should someday put him in his place. So in short story is good but Oc and characters who interacted(mainly tavern) are really made poor and disappointing. So I will put 7/10. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love the story and I hope the author of the story is well, although I would like him to take up the story again and continue the updates. I understand that what happened is a delicate matter, I just wish him to recover and be able to continue with this great story. |
![]() ![]() The way the dragon talked reminded me of Smaug. Did you take inspiration from that? |
![]() ![]() ![]() fly high you were a good story |
![]() ![]() ![]() Very good story I like it. However I feel like our dear mc gets gassed up too much. Also I don’t understand why our mc is pissing his pants and acting like a yorkie terrier on steroids over Syr. Like okay she is Freya or an aspect of her but why should that matter to the extent he has to call her a bitch and threaten to kill her? If anything that draws more attention to you when you act dramatic like that. If I want Freya to leave me alone I’m not going to threaten Syr and act wild in front of everyone I would just acting boring. Except everything he seems to do draws attention to himself. Effortlessly beating level fours as a flex instead of just getting Mia or the other waitresses to do it, dropping a million on a table casually in front of everyone. It feels like he wants the attention. He should simply take it calmly instead of losing his shit. It makes him look like a kid and its more cringe then badass everytime he snaps at her. And by the seven gods he is edgy as hell. Every word that drizzles from his mouth is like “hey Im edgy do you realize it yet or do I need to wear a choker?” Also it feels extremely forced the relationship between our mc and Ryuu. I can already tell where the arrow ends and its going to be one of those knights and shining armor saving the girl from the darkness. And speaking of that there is the Aiz business. I actually liked it. It was interesting to say the least and her conflict was pretty well done that I would actually use some of those ideas but a few thing struck me. One; Oh my god she is so self-dependent on Bell it’s ridiculous. Its one thing to have him as a support but no her feet aren’t even placed on the ground. Bell has her sweeped up. It demeans her character and by the end she will be worthless and more akin to Sakura in fate. What I want to see is her solving everything on her own. She shouldn’t need a man to help her solve her problems. Bete was right she’s just whining. Most if not all of the characters in Danmachi’s parents are dead. I don’t see why she is so special in that regard. Nevertheless, despite my issues its not a bad fic. A solid 8/10 looking forward to the next. |
![]() ![]() Any News when this returns? It's really good and unique. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is getting way too soap opera-y. I wish this dude would stop talking and just punch Syr in the fucking face. Also makes no sense for him to trust some random woman he barely knows with his secrets. |
![]() ![]() ![]() this dude has to be half retarded like why is he such a cunt to everyone. fuck i knew someone in highschool who got abused physically and they never acted like this. god this MC is a cunt |
![]() ![]() ![]() it's good, keep up the good work |
![]() ![]() This story is god. First cause Arien is an asshole, he knows and everyone know it and have consecuences, no one likes him and no people is trying to defend him, is an asshole and im sure in the future even Ryuu can say that to their child. "Your father is an asshole but also is my asshole" Second, so f*cking glad to see an OC who dont take away the attention of Bell, both have their own lives, and Bell is still the protagonist. Third, He dont want attention, he dont like attention, he dont want to be the protagonist. Now the question, what kind of relationship have with Bell? the "you killed my mother" or "Youre the only thing i can remember my mother" The last thing, i believe Arien should call Materia his mother, she literally raised him, call her aunt sound quite strange. |
![]() ![]() It#s sooo goood. Please when update? |
![]() ![]() ![]() O. M. G. What an amazing story! It’s just all very well planned and thought through. It literally feels like a genuine new volume of the original story. I don’t care if you are not the author, and you’re only the writer. My thanks and congratulations to the both of you, you have created an amazing story. Thank you for letting us enjoyed it. Hope you can update soon, it’s really an amazing story, and I am waiting to see what you will do in the next chapter |
![]() ![]() ![]() I appreciate how thought out this story is but it’s really frustrating to read. I actually adore slower-paced novels. This isn’t slow though, it’s repetitive. Way too much time spent on just Finn explaining why they need to focus on Fearless and how dangerous it is. I also don’t particularly understand this obsession with Fearless being an “asshole”. He for sure is abrasive. But he isn’t an asshole for standing up for his boundaries. He repeatedly told Syr to leave him alone, not talk to him, and to stop touching him. However, both the waitresses and the author paint him as the bad guy because he called her a bitch a couple of times? Also, no matter how you spin it, I can’t see it as anything other than plot convenience for him to be at the hostess of fertility considering how much he despises Syr. Considering how well thought out your story is , his reasoning for staying initially was incredibly lazy. He just happened to be really tired after taking care of 3 random adventures within 2 minutes and thus he decides to stay at the inn of someone who he calls extremely dangerous every other paragraph. Your story is so well-written sometimes that these gaps in logic just really standout. Despite my grievances, I appreciate your story |
![]() ![]() ![]() An amazing story, one of the best I read so far, I really liked how you used Bell and Aiz characters and I absolutely loved chapter 9. I am sorry for your loss and I hope you can recover soon but take your time, we will wait for you. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'll be waiting ma man |