Good story; thought him creating the alias of Duncan was unnecessary but other then that it was a very interesting read thanks for the content

At the end of my reading i am left quite disppointed in this. I read it all the way though, but i cant help but wish for the story untold.

This could've been twice the fic if it would've been given more love where it was deserved. More than half, of this writing is full of unbearable typos and missing words. I skimmed this more often than not, because it was simply unable to flow together.

Another point entirely, is that this fic utterly failed to deliver on its original concept. I loved the begining of this with the dragon. I had a few misgivings on how it was handled in general, but that pales in comparison to the fact that it was just outright thrown away and fucking ignored for seemingly no reason.

It's a bait and switch that doesn't even need to be there. The adventure of Jon trying to discover his pararentage is story enough on it's own. If a damn dragon wasn't included then tossed away like a child's pet, i wouldn't be dreaming of the story that could've been when it comes to the plot as well.

It is fucking sad seeing the quality of your writing go to the gutter and then rise from scene to scene depending on your interest of writing it.

I can outright point out which conversations and scenes you take interest in by the amount of crappy errors in them.

The ones that are more readable and important to the plot are less full of errors. The others almost require skimming as a necessity.

I'd love to see this without all the errors in it. I can tell you know how to write, but little to no time is spent editing your work. There are so many ridiculous errors a single readthrough aloud with grammarly would instantly fix.

It's sad finding an uncut diamond in the rough instead of a glittering gem.

Reallly enjoyed this!

idiot boy can't finish a story he posts

If you're too brain dead to finish your story, maybe stop posting. Idiot.

amazing story so far, let's see them escape kings landing return to North Winterfell,and find the direwolves ,i hope you can update soon

Can't wait for more! This genuinely is very great. The time skip caught me off guard but its fun to see how far he comes. Hopefully some flashbacks in store to catch us up on what got him here. Keep it up!

Update soon

White harbor is 400 mi from winterfell. on horseback 2 to 3 weeks, not a few days.

great set up. feels like its just starting

Sorry my phone showed a differen update date , please continue

Sad you did not continue. It was a great story

im really enjoying this I can't wait for more