This was very, very fun. Well written from start to finish, and very clever.

I appreciated that there is no true "happy ending" - fundamentally, they are still sparring like enemies, because they have keep playing the roles. But you've certainly made clear where Klink's allegiances lie and what is motivating him. I am not surprised by this, but you show a great deal of insight into his character.

In this chapter, I got a good chuckle out of Klink's mention of Carter's extremely prominent Adam's apple - we definitely notice a lot of the same things, and I agree, Carter needs to make some effort to cover it.

Really, really nice work! So happy I finally got to read it.

My favorite line in this chapter is "as if I could ever die peacefully with YOU around." Hahaha, perfectly in character! Also, the sideburns, oh my God. Yes! Make that man shave! I really like your portrayal of Klink.

In the last chapter, I somehow missed the detail on why Klink was suddenly bleeding. I just got it after re-reading that chapter - the answer was in this one!

Also in chapter 3, I meant to comment on Klink's remarks about Hogan's various lame assumed names! That was really funny. Hogan Hoople, hahaha!

Interesting move by Hogan to donate blood directly to Klink. He feels responsible, clearly.

I am really impressed by the writing - you have really sure hand, and you're balancing narrative and dialogue really beautifully. I'm a little surprised that Hogan could be so ignorant about the conditions in Europe after WW1, though - surely he would have learned that somewhere along the line before being deployed in such a critical, sensitive role.

I was on the fence about the pacing of the repartee. I hoped Hogan would let Klink's words sink in instead of summoning up a smart answer to everything- that impassioned soliloquy about the horrors Klink saw in WW1 was really impressive and it was hard to believe Hogan wasn't silenced by it, for at least a moment. But even though it's not how I would have preferred to see the dialogue play out, I think you ultimately dealt with it with Klink's comment about the brilliant mastermind being left speechless. (Talk about a bombshell!) I do think you missed a little opportunity to show us Hogan's reaction to Klink's assertion (being purposefully vague to avoid spoilers here.) Hogan had to lie, I got that - but wow, he must have been shaking inside!

Overall, excellent work. Riveting story!

Reviewathon. This is pretty gripping stuff, and you are doing a nice job balancing the humor and the drama. Plus, the pace is excellent. You're putting all the pieces into place very neatly. No time wasted in spilling the details of what problem they have to solve, presumably so we can get on with the mission. Newkirk seemed a little cold-blooded in embracing his role so eagerly, and Carter seems a little irony-deficient. ("I hate seeing people hurt," he said on his way out to kill someone...) I don't read torture, so I'm hoping you won't get graphic.

I'm sure you've heard my thoughts before on the drawbacks of writing Newkirk's voice in dialect and presumably you have dismissed them, but I'm going to make my case again. Readers can HEAR the accent. Better to show it's Newkirk through word choice and phrasing. Otherwise, why not just start writing everyone's accent phonetically? You can have all the Germans saying "zese" and "zose" and "zem." I assume you wouldn't do that, so why single out Newkirk's speech and twist it?

LeBeau should say mon pote. Mon ami is more like girlfriend/boyfriend.

Reviewathon time! This is a very nice start to your story. You are a skilled writer and you've delivered crisp, convincing dialogue. It's interesting that you establish right at the top that something untoward has been happening for three whole nights, because Hogan isn't usually slow on the uptake. I wonder what he's been thinking/speculating- surely he doesn't really think Klink is sloping off to a see a woman! But I have a feeling that I'll learn a lot more about Hogan's angle in the next chapter or two.

Fine story, loaded with h/c, my first and forever fanfic love. Favorite tropes include bathing, bedside sitting and so many others, all included in this fic. :) Happy writing to you, even if it's not on FFN. *sigh* Poor FFN, she needs an anti-virus shot or something. :)

Good research - I like how Klink /appears/ to hold his own re the torture, but then collapses because he's human, after all. *reads on*

A great (beginning) friendship story. Perhaps a shade too risqué for my taste, but it reads well. I think they could be friends.

I must say..the story so far is very interesting. It honestly surprised me that Klink knows about Hogan's operation that goes on beneath the barracks. :) Well done, I have to say. Can't wait for the next chapter.