Finally caught up with this story after a few days. I gotta say I have t quite enjoyed a story this much in quite a long time. I hope to continue reading future installments and hope everything goes well on your end. Can’t wait for the next chapter keep up the amazing work.

Over use of noble phantasms. They are supposed to feel important, but you are just fucking tossing them in to the wind. Why not use then blades he ALWAYS USES?!

Love this story this was my 5th reread of this story. The only thing that I can see to make a good story great would be to have a paragraph or two of Hestia Going off on Artemis or her stunt with the giant pig giving when Artemis name dropped about knowing that the two was married and most likely the baby being there. Hestia could have mistaken it to do Arty's dislike of men not to say she would get physical like she does with Aries woman can get there point across without trying to throw hands like guy do. Other than that this is one of my favs. in the Fate crossover series and I also like the other story the reading of this one.

Genial cono siempre. Pobre shirou esta muy ocupados con sus esposas e hijos. Y los que le faltan.

Thank you for the chapter. I am sadden that I caught up with the most recent chapter, but you're doing amazing work!

cool chapy

Had a blast reading this im fairly new to both the Fate and PJO series, thanks for the fantastic chapter!

you poor underworld goddess, just go say hi! you can do it, he's your Shirou and he'd love you being included in his family!

Great chapter

SHIROU EMIYARULER SERVANT FUCK YES THAT'S A BETTER ENDING FOR HIM!

Also it seems like youre trying to speed through everything that SHOULD take MULTIPLE chapters, like 10s of chapters. Things such as romantic feelings, feelings of curiosity being shot in the head with answers before it can settle and much more. You also kept treating this like a one shot turned two shot, with the immediate lore exposition and info dumping of his background to every character that he locked eyes with.

I am once again reminded that i just have high standards because i cannot grasp how people thought these two chapters were good and be old enough to vote. The thing about this thats the biggest shame is that it would not have taken much work to rework the first chapter to be less rushed (since it was a oneshot) and have iron out the creases.

Aaaand then this killed any remaining interest i had left. Goddamn thats impressive how you could make almost every bad narrative decision possible. Speedrunning your way to a new bad end ig.

Classic forced age regression for the sake of pairings
Pretty much an OC lite, from what i can see.
A mother?
Youd think that an 18/19 year old shirou would be a TAD bit more cautious in unknown territory.
Why would hestia be suspicious that he was born clear sighted since there are people just like that.
Ive always hated when transmigrated mcs are stupid/ tell all of their secrets the second they meet someone. Like come on man, have some common sense.
Might aswell tell her your daily schedule at this point along with your ssn, shirou.
Tf is orion doing here?
Do much damn talking in the middle of a fight/before a fight. Its so ass. Like “hey, lets talk about our childhoods before we try to kill each other”
Not to mention how cringe shirous being. I dont think he could be laying it on any thicker, with his hero shit. Even in canon in the routes where hes the most entangled in heroism hes not this bad.
? WHAT THE FUCK? First real fight in this world, also first chapter and you have him using his TRUMP CARD, on the first enemy he faces? This is beyond ass. Unlimited ass writing.
Even as a one shot, its ass.

loved the Monty Python reference! the only person that comes to mind for the person in the last section is Ereshkigal but I don't know how that'd work.

Glad to see a new update. The quest is officially started, with the group being Percy, Ana, Miyu, and Grover. Ophelia won’t be joining them, but she will be joining Thalia and Abigail’s quest to check on the imprisoned titans. Sadly with the luck they inherited from their father, along with their own reckless nature, neither quest will be anywhere close to going smoothly. The Master Bolt Questers did a great job against the Furies. With Miyu even managing to snag one of their flame whips. I imagine later on Shirou will either modify it for her, or use it as a base design to build her a better one. The bus was still unusable for them, but at least all the passengers were safe. Hopefully Percy doesn’t still get accused of the accident.

As for Shirou, he was back at home making preparations before heading out to meet Bellona and the Amazons. But before that, Shirou had some “special time” with Aphrodite. Although I’m not sure on what the anniversary was for, as I remember Ophelia was conceived from a kiss under a mistletoe.

After that, Shirou went with Artemis and their children to visit Leto. She gave him some good advice and insight. While Shirou and the others were still in unsure of how Stella and Robin’s conception came to be, Leto had a theory. That their birth was a “gift” to Artemis. Although the identity of who gave these “gifts” was still unknown. Since the connection between Shirou and Artemis was through Nature, that narrows the list. Although the number of gods that would act with such pure benevolence is almost none. I’m really hoping Gaea didn’t have anything to do with this, as that would mean she has plans for the twins. Which would definitely not be good. Maybe it was Pan? While he’s still stuck Fading in and out of existence, but he’s still connected to nature. Whoever it was, they must’ve done something connect Shirou and Artemis together during his mediation to connect with Nature. Essentially being the “pollinator” between Shirou and Artemis, resulting in the birth of Stella and Robin. Although I could be way off on this theory.

Another interesting thing to note is that lately Shirou’s been feeling the call of Muramasa’s Noble Phantasm in his Reality Marble. Tsumukari Muramasa: Originless Creation of Swords, the ultimate blade that can sever time, space, and even fate. Shirou believed he had moved on from his “Hero of Justice phase” in order to be a good husband and father. But Leto told him that even though he’s not the type of hero he originally wanted to be, those ideals are still ingrained in him. She also thinks that the reason this project has been a recurring thought for him is to remind himself of this.

As for Thalia, she ended up getting visited by Luke. It was clear that he didn’t want her to go. Probably a combination of him not wanting her to interfere with his master’s plans, but also out of genuine concern of not wanting her to get hurt. Even though they didn’t meet as kids, it appears this Luke still has developed a crush on her. Although Thalia still plans on going, not for the gods but because she doesn’t want any other campers getting killed. Although looks like her words of comfort to Luke only made him more resolved to “make thing better”. While Thalia felt something was off, it wasn’t enough to make her suspect anything too serious. Also, it was hilarious seeing Aphrodite pranking Thalia with a makeover after she said the love goddess’s name.

And apparently Hectate is close on the trail to Shirou’s home. She has zero ill will or malicious intentions. She just wants to sate her curiousity, excited at the possibility of learning new magic. It also appears that she recognizes the faint divinity. I wonder if she’ll make it in time before Shirou heads out, or if she’ll be too late and instead meet the goddesses that stayed home.

It was also funny seeing Miyu antagonize Zeus, since she knew he wouldn’t try to harm them no matter how much he wanted to. Doing so would risk having Athena, Aphrodite, and Hestia turning against him during his war with Poseidon. As arrogant as Zeus is, even he knows he can’t handle four Olympians at once. And that’s not even including the others who would ally with them against Zeus if he hurt the Emiya children. However Zeus still decided to show his anger at her words through the lighting and rumbling in the sky. He only stopped when Miyu brought up Rhea also getting involved if he did anything to them. Percy and Grover were very shocked at her fearlessness in taunting the King of Olympus. Percy thought it was because she hated the gods, when it’s really more that she hates the situation they and the other campers are in because of the selfishness and cowardice of Zeus and many of the other gods. Add in the fact that Zeus would’ve killed all them immediately if it weren’t for the threat of retaliation from their parents, and Zeus is definitely not her favorite person in the world right now. Percy and Grover were also shocked to learn that Miyu and her sisters were raised by Hestia. Ana didn’t want to explain it herself, but plans on have it explained to them when they reach their home for a break. But before that, they’ll have to go through “Aunty Em”. I wonder if hearing stories from Shirou will make Miyu and/or Ana want to try and help Medusa. While they can’t break her curse without Rule Breaker, they might be able to help her some other way? It was also funny seeing Miyu get hit on the head from Hestia sending her a note to behave.

Although I’m not quite sure who that was at the end. Part of it makes me think it might be Melinoe, but I’m not completely sure. They way she talked sounded different. I guess I’ll just have to wait and see. Anywho, I wish you good luck with your writing and I hope to see the next update soon.