I'm glad you tried to finish this, but you could do so much better. I hope you write more, but I understand things can stay in the way.

I hope you write sort of leaves it hanging still...

It's a great story. I just want to know more about Lola. What happened to her and why is Bray just now finding her? What's their story?

Great story, short and sweet! :D Is there gonna be any follow up? Don't mean to sound rude, lol, I'd just love to find out how Bray takes this in the long run! As I said, great story!