|Reviews for The Net, the Shell, and the Sword|
| HXCsd chapter 1 . 9/4
| Sailor Titan chapter 1 . 9/4/2004
I like how you've fleshed out Ioz's past and explained some of his character quirks. Your story is maybe a bit heavy on detail, but I hope you'll think about continuing the story and fleshing out some of Ioz's years before joining the crew.
| Momento chapter 1 . 7/22/2003
Alright, that was awesome! Excellent job on character development, personally I think that Ioz had the best character development in the show and you really brought to life how he left home. I really enjoyed the part with Miri (mira?), it explained the reason he acts the way he does around women.
A little bit of criticism, though, though this is probably the inner academic though, there was a little bit of inconsistancy, but given the nature of the story it's fine. Speculation is speculation and I BS constantly in order to get where I need sometimes, you don't stretch it as much as I do. Editing wise, in my opinion you need to break the paragraphs more, but that is complete opinion.
Good story, heh, calls for a sequel!