My name is Corey Villoria nee Chase. My stepson KR Duelist aka Kristoffer Villoria is writing fanfictions and I am so proud of him !

Too his haters please stop bullying him ! He is such a good boy; helping around the house, joking around and cheering me up, and more importantly keeping my pussy warm whenever his dad is on a business trip.

Let me describe his cock; it's nine inches in length and 4 inches in girth. It's the best thing a stepmom can ask for. Like when he enters me I can't help but mewl and moan in delight. Weve done it around the house; the kitchen, the living room, and even at the porch one night when I was waiting for him to come home. The point is he is much more manlier than all of his bashers combined ! You are just jelous of him !

There was one time that I got stuck in the washing machine and like any good stepson, he helped me out by using his manly cock, stuffing it inside me, and using it as a wedge to pull me out. We then proceeded to do it in the laundry area.

I am so proud of you my darling boy ! Don't give up and keep writing those Kamen Rider fanfics !

To his bullies and haters, PM me so we can negotiate ! I am willing to do anything for him !

Chaos Control !

Praise Hyper Shadow 2024 !

I am definatly not the other handsome author I mentioned above !

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My name is Corey Villoria nee Chase. My stepson KR Duelist aka Kristoffer Villoria is writing fanfictions and I am so proud of him !

Too his haters please stop bullying him ! He is such a good boy; helping around the house, joking around and cheering me up, and more importantly keeping my pussy warm whenever his dad is on a business trip.

Let me describe his cock; it's nine inches in length and 4 inches in girth. It's the best thing a stepmom can ask for. Like when he enters me I can't help but mewl and moan in delight. Weve done it around the house; the kitchen, the living room, and even at the porch one night when I was waiting for him to come home. The point is he is much more manlier than all of his bashers combined ! You are just jelous of him !

There was one time that I got stuck in the washing machine and like any good stepson, he helped me out by using his manly cock, stuffing it inside me, and using it as a wedge to pull me out. We then proceeded to do it in the laundry area.

I am so proud of you my darling boy ! Don't give up and keep writing those Kamen Rider fanfics !

To his bullies and haters, PM me so we can negotiate ! I am willing to do anything for him !

Chaos Control !

Praise Hyper Shadow 2024 !

I am definatly not the other handsome author I mentioned above !

qgqeg

Breaking the fourth wall.

This has interesting storylines seeming to offer real yearning in stressful generations. A really brave achievement. Getting emboldened. Seeing high innovation tales brings real optimism.

A little bit better, but still could be longer.

Just remember what I said to you from our earlier conversation. As for you trolls who worship this person, get a life! You're only making their life and the lives of those you harass miserable!

It’s too short

Shadow my awesome grandson me and the rest of our family love you very much. Stay awesome and always be good.

안녕하세요 하이퍼 섀도우! 이 이야기를 잘 하셨습니다! 그만둔 KDLE과는 달리 당신은 진정으로 역대 최고의 팬픽 작가입니다. 나와 여자들은 빨리 너한테 그룹 입으로 다시 한 번 해주고 싶어!

That was a good fight, and the 4th wall breaks were pretty funny

First and foremost, I haven’t watched the Flash, so any predispositions that would have made the readers more enthralled with these characters is lost on me— so this review with a grain of salt.

Since this is a parody fic, most of what happens in this chapter can’t be taken too seriously— which is fine. For example, the lightsaber battle was entertaining, as the immersion had been broken earlier in the fic.

The constructive criticism I have to offer comes from a few notable patterns I found throughout the fic. When writing, it’s best to stick to either past tense, or present tense— switching back and forth from the two can make the flow of the narration seem a bit wonky. It’s not TOO distracting, but it’s just some advice I have for you.

There are some run on sentences that could be broken up with semicolons, commas, and or dashes— especially in the dialogue, which on its own felt unengaging at times. That just comes with practice and reading what you wrote down back to yourself; one of my own tools that I use is to finish writing a section of the back-and-forth dialogue, and asking yourself if this is something an actual person would say, or at least if that’s how the character would speak.

What I did like about your fic is that I had an easy time understanding who was talking, and that you knew to write a new paragraph each time someone else started to speak. Kudos for that. The plot was, for the most part, easy to follow too. If I were a fan of the live-action Flash, I think this would definitely appeal to me more, but even without that prior knowledge… I would have to say that the story was definitely okay.

Well...that was a weird ending. A lot of 4th wall breaking, it reminds me of a Deadpool movie. But good riddance on Godspeed.