Ok this chapter brought tears to my eyes

I love this story and this fic. Sirius is my favorite character so I can't wait to see more of him. Also, if this is supposed to be canon, Tonks should have just graduated. She's 7 years older than Harry. Remus had said in his argument he is 13 years older than Tonks. James and Lily had Harry at 20. So that makes a seven years age gap between them.

This story has a major problem, namely that a large chunk of the plot so far feels like a voucher book full of plot coupons, each one marked 'Redeem Once, Then Discard'.

Right at the beginning, we have several chapters with Future!Harry, then he's gone, with his memories 'randomly' returning to remind Harry of some obscure tidbit. Everything about his life after Hogwarts is pretty much unknown.

Meanwhile, nearly half the story is taken up by 'Harry (and Sirius) get settled at Potter Manor'. I've not yet read much further, but the story has already spent too much time on details that aren't likely to be important, and Harry unintentionally changing numerous things by redeeming plot coupons early or incorrectly.

I'm willing to forgive this, since it's your first story, but it's very much a 'paint-by-numbers' story, except you threw out half the paint colors.

Why there is no Hermione on party? I mean, she is friend, isn't she?

Felt a bit off that Harry was more of a passive character—like the plot was moving him, rather than him making things happen. And the whole “Oh no, I might not end up with my friends” thing, but don't really care felt a bit cringy. At least I see this that way

Dora should be in her seventh year not sixth since she’s seventeen, or have graduated the year before with Charlie Weasley according to canon.

A most excellent story. It flows well. Enjoyed the twists.

not fond of younger harry taking his body back. feel like i wasted my time reading the last 6 chapters. probably a good idea to put that in the summary

Why have him attend Hogwarts at all? It seems blatantly clear that Albus Dumbledore cannot be trusted in the least with Harry's well being, so sending him to a castle controlled by Dumbledore, filled with students and staff who hold him in high esteem and, most importantly, currently the location of the wraith of Voldemort, is a terrible notion.

I have read a few, "Harry gets sent elsewhere after going through the veil" stories before, but this is the first I remember where he didn't replace the younger Harry entirely or have it be another dimension that for whatever reason had no Harry Potter to replace in the first place. I really enjoyed it and am looking forward to reading the next one!

Im reading this again bc I love the premise so much

I looked it up, and the Pavane is actually a VERY easy dance to learn! Watch the vid once through, and you'll have it down ;D

bonne fic!

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Ruined by ch.9. To be expected, since thats when most writers fuck up their stories. Waste of time starting this.